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The Order of New America
Author: Elago
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(Added on Nov 15, 2014)
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Years after the Great Silence, a nuclear apocalypse that has destroyed civilization as we know, the small community of Rashbelt leads a harsh life under the leadership of Stan Carson. When his father dies, a letter from a mysterious Father John invites him to visit the community of New America and "learn about their ways". |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Michelle Byssom
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Jan 24, 2015 |
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<br /><b>Warning</b>: Function eregi_replace() is deprecated in <b>/home/bdsmlibr/public_html/stories/review_add.php</b> on line <b>40</b><br />Lovely unfolding explanation of an erotic system of governance. I think Stan should keep his opinions more to himself :) and do try to reduce all the 'background' non-erotic stuff... I know it's difficult, but focus on the essentials. Beautiful description of the pony girls' situation. Really top marks for that! (7/10)
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efrelgt
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Jan 2, 2015 |
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Can't wait to read the rest of the story! (9/10)
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sven_b2
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Dec 25, 2014 |
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Great story. Well written and interesting concept. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
SubbieSlut
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Dec 16, 2014 |
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Waiting on the next installment! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
graziadoon
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Dec 1, 2014 |
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I really enjoyed your story - it had just the right combination of narrative and erotic. I hope to see more! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Nov 21, 2014 |
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Fairly well-written post-apocalypse story which has akins to "Mad Max", "The Book Of Eli" and PC-game "FallOut 3".
One thing that bugs me is the fact Elago chose to write the story from the first-person perspective. It limits the view on society, as we only see and hear things through the eyes and mind of one person.
Furthermore, it also limits Elago since he/she's stuck with this main character until the end.
Dialogues are nicely done, which is a relief.
Overall, a good start with a lot of promise.
JJ (8/10)
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- Replied by:
elago
(Edit) (Dec 1, 2014)
- Thank you for your review, you touched a theme that I considered deeply during the writing (and still considering it as i'm working on the second part). The first person was a difficult choice I made on purpose. I wanted to explore the theme of discovery: how fascination and moral rejection interact in a human being that is not - as most bdsm narrative takes for granted - at ease with the concept of domination. I hope this will be an interesting point of view.
- Replied by:
JimmyJump
(Edit) (Dec 5, 2014)
- It *is* an interesting point of view, but only when well-written.
The exploration here needs to be dual; first off the world as it is seen/experienced by your main character, secondly an inner exploration of that same character...
Judging by how you started, I think you'll manage ;)
JJ
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