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Fit Family (House Training)
Author: Pagan
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(Added on Aug 15, 2002)
(This month 22898 readers) (Total 59658 readers) |
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She was helpless and alone with her two daughters. They ware at the hands of the low-life and her sister and niece were coming. Is this pervert heaven? Just how much perversion can they take? |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 18, 2004 |
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The 9 is for the story concept, the reading of the story is more a 3-4, what i would like to know is why authors such as yourself start a good story idea, then leave it hang and do no more posts, if authors start a story, even if it isn't "great" please at least finish it so the reader is not left hanging, i would rather read a realy bad story complete then a good to great story not finished (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
rcb
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Aug 26, 2003 |
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Pagan has some good story lines -- but needs an English 101 course for starters. (3/10)
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drake7
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Aug 16, 2002 |
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I read the synopsis and saw at least one obviously mispelled word. Pagan your story ideas are interesting but your grammar makes them unreadable- seeing the mispelled word in the synopsis makes me certain the rest of the story is as poorly written as your other stories I have tried to read. (1/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Aug 15, 2002 |
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This author has written a lot of stories so presumably he/she is imaginative. I keep checking stories to see if he's bothered to proofread one. The answer is still "No." I have never made it to the second page of one of his stories. The content (for all I know) may be fabulous, but the style is unreadable. Please, Pagan, and I mean this to be helpful, do yourself (and us) a favor and edit these stories before you post them. Give your ideas a chance. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Aug 15, 2002 |
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It would probably make a good story if I could get through the bad structure. Mumble paragraphs, poor punctuation, poor spacing and capitalization. (3/10)
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