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Police Story
Author: pamela
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(Added on Oct 22, 2002)
(This month 32342 readers) (Total 60805 readers) |
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Young New York woman is put through a four-day ordeal of rape, torture and degradation in a southern jail, and all in iambic pentameter. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
nm.jayhawk
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Oct 15, 2010 |
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That's what I like about the South. ;-) (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Oct 30, 2008 |
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Well written, great narrative and depiction... well done!
JJ (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 30, 2004 |
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love the story, could done without the dog but i lived with it (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Jan 29, 2004 |
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The rape and torture were no better than in many other stories, but the structure deserves a 10, so that's what I gave it. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
don11
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Jun 17, 2003 |
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A tour de force.
Amazing ... (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Oct 27, 2002 |
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This story would no doubt read better as a typical prose story than in pentameter.
But as Dr Johnson said when talking about a dog walking on his hind legs -- "It is not done well; but you are surprised to find it done at all." <br> This narrative in verse, fortunately, moves better than that apocryphal dog. <br>I would give this story an 11 for daring and creativity, and a 12 for diligence. Anyone who has ever attempted poetry can attest to the hours it must have taken to accomplish this feat. (For those whose iambic pentameter is a little rusty, it means that each line has precisely ten syllables, no more no less; it takes a great deal of care and patience to write coherently in this format).<br>A 9 for content, too. A nice, nasty tale.<br>But alas, only an 8 for execution; the metrical format is extremely constraining, it seems to me, and other effects have to be subordinated to it.<br>Another tiny flaw is that much of the verse is not really 'iambic' which requires the even-numbered syllables in each 10-syllable line to carry the accent -- de-DUM de-DUM.<br>But those are mere quibbles. My hat's off to the author for attempting such a difficult and risky task, when it's so much easier to churn out more conventional stories. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
snippet
(Edit) (Oct 29, 2002)
- Strange. The four scores you gave Pamela on this story (8,9,11 and 12) average out to a score of 10, yet you gave her only a 9... and it can’t be for your iambic lament; as you said that was only a quibble. Come on Boccaccio, do the right thing. Cough up the 10. You know she deserves it. :-)
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| Reviewer:
snippet
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Oct 23, 2002 |
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An intense, imaginative and well-written tale. I like the intro blurb -is it saluting reviewers who discount stïries for the sheer joy of pedantry? (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
rainee
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Oct 23, 2002 |
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This reviewer must agree with the previous review.The structure of the story was done poorly,and proof reading is a must!! I did find the story very erotic in parts, but to quote from the story,"Where's the Fire?"...Slow down and don't rush from one scene to the next.Allow the reader to savor each described event (5/10)
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- Replied by:
pamela
(Edit) (Oct 24, 2002)
- See reply to previous review.
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Oct 23, 2002 |
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The story was good but the structure was bad. Each time a character speaks, a new paragraph should be used. Author writes long paragraphs with many people speaking. Also exceedingly many times words have capital letters with no apparent reason in the middle of the sentence.
Author would do well to allow someone to proof read the story first. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
pamela
(Edit) (Oct 24, 2002)
- Police Story was written as a kind of poem, in blank verse and iambic pentameter. As it first appeared here, it was not broken into lines, as it should be; it has since been corrected. If you look at it again I think you will find it easier to read.
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