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In Trouble Again
Author: spoytllady
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(Added on Oct 30, 2002)
(This month 9600 readers) (Total 17923 readers) |
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Short take on master and slave at home... |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
janey
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Apr 16, 2005 |
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I just hate stories like this. It begins with the burning butt plug in her ass, no set up, no development, and ends with a loving kiss. Totally out of touch with reality and boring, boring, boring. (4/10)
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ropebinder
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Mar 23, 2005 |
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The story begins with no introduction, throwing me (the reader) into a situation with no explanation or reason. It's too short to call a story. I would call it a thought or a glimpse. The author's command of English and composition grades a C, with some talented lines, but too many fragments and run-ons.
I cannot recommend this "story". (4/10)
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fetish101
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Feb 23, 2004 |
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This was weak. It had potential but was so short. Also, this doesn't sound like a bdsm relationship, rather another abusive relationship where the women feels trapped. Big difference. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Moggy
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Nov 1, 2002 |
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Simply too short to give any real enjoyment to the reader. Grammar and spelling are OK, else I might have rated it lower still. (4/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Nov 1, 2002 |
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This appears to be the beginning of a longer story, which may or may not turn out to have some merit. But whether it is or is not, am I being unfair in asking for episodes and stories with more content? We've had quite a spate of 3kb, 5kb, 10kb stories and chapters lately. A few of the micro-stories have worked, but most have not. (IMO)
To the authors who try to begin a story with a micro-chapter, may I say that I suspect that it is very difficult to make a favorable and enduring first impression on most readers with such a sparse initial offering. If you want your guests to stay for the entire meal, the first course needs to be more than a tease of a taste. Just my opinion. (4/10)
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