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Marsha Meets Her Neighbor
Author: Marsha
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(Added on Nov 4, 2002)
(This month 37221 readers) (Total 72110 readers) |
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This is the sequel of A Divorced Wife Explores Yahoo. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
Dryhill
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Jun 1, 2010 |
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Yes much better than your first story, but still many spelling errors and poorish grammar. Also an error in the story, at the begging you state that the girl is on holiday yet a few paragraphs later she is coming home from school. Another point in your first story you mention it is cold yet in this story they are sitting in swimsuites by the pool - i thought only a few days had passed?
Other than that this was a good story well told with plenty of charaterization. Keep up the writing. (7/10)
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raptor1981
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Aug 23, 2005 |
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sorry about my english because it isn't my first language but.... Marsha, you have really a great talent, your story is awsome, i really enjoyed reading it (well to tell you the truth i'm a woman and i had orgasm about 3 times during reading your story). I would really love to see the continuation of your story, i already have a lot's of ideas about the next parts, and would love to share them with you (9/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 10, 2004 |
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yes sir!!!! or in this case yes mam!!!! (8/10)
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e.e. norcod
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Oct 10, 2003 |
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A significant improvement over your first story. However you still have a long way to go in terms of grammar. It would be interesting to know what your first language was because I suspect you are very literate in that language. You are developing a good feel for setting up a scene and giving vent to fantasy. I hope to see some further efforts on your part. (7/10)
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cajun_nomad
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Nov 8, 2002 |
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Good story, nice to see an author that can write with out resorting to profanity with every other word. (8/10)
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