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Just Thinking
Author: Ayla
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(Added on Dec 13, 2002)
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A slave's daydream about the night she willingly gave herself to the Man she would call Master... |
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| Reviewer:
Engineer
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Aug 12, 2006 |
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Not much thinking involved by the author. Sorry. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 14, 2004 |
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and this is very generous (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Dec 15, 2002 |
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Umm, is it my imagination, or does the author have something religiously against ending the story? I looked over the first 20-30 lines, and at the end of the story, and all End-Of-Sentence markers are gotten around by using ',,,', even in the case of
'? ...'. This is rather annoying, as it seems the story is just one big bad sentence. I dislike the writing style as well. The constant capitalization of My, and Mine, etc. I dislike this when used in reference to the fantasy some people call god, and I think it is silly to capitalize it when referring to someone else. The language was OK ... one can't expect everyone to spell Maitre D' properly, so I will forgive that. The syntax, or rather lack thereof, is what really bothered me. (1/10)
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