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Flogging Michiko
Author: Sir Kane
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(Added on Jan 7, 2003)
(This month 10178 readers) (Total 21803 readers) |
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An intense torture session between master and slut where both participants have equal time to give their own perspective on events. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
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Jan 6, 2004 |
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I fear LaJan was a little harsh. Basically this was a good story, particularly when taken in sequence with the author's other story. Yes the prose is stilted but the author appears to be learning the art of descriptive prose and action writing. I didn't say great but with practice I see potential here. A four is for a bad story which this is not.
As for the screed over the miss-coding, I agree that this is reluctant rather than nc and rape does not really describe the nature of the relationship but I have a feeling that Alebeard that ultimate ultimate promoter of Rape Pillage and Plunder would probably not complain excessively after reading this fiction.
Keep at it, good luck.
(7/10)
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| Reviewer:
LadyLibra
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Apr 10, 2003 |
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Starts out a little slow the turning of Michiko was very good when reading them both together you might find yourself looking for more/new updates from the author (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
LaJan
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Jan 13, 2003 |
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Damn it. I have fallen for yet another story with incorrect coding! It wouldn't be so bad if I liked the story but, alas, I didn't. If the flipping between characters had been done with even the slightest hint of where it began and ended, I may have been able to suffer through the "guess where?" paragraph structure. Unfortunately, the grammatical errors ("...and I can't no longer suppress ...") made that too much work to be worth the effort. On top of that, I had to read passages over and over again before I realized that someone was actually supposed to be speaking. The quotation marks (") are either missing or incorrect throughout. Finally, the ultimate transgression was inflicted upon me: I wasted my precious time looking for all the substance to support the coding (Story Codes: M/f spanking D/s S/M slavery bondage real reluctant torture nc Serious rape) and found it lacking. Rape? If so, it's the most willing "rape" on record.
The sole reason I will not rip the author apart for this story is the fact that it appears to be his first on this site. All new writers need time to develop their own style and become more familiar with the craft. Sir Kane may yet redeem himself with the promised future updates for this story. Until then, I will withhold the deserved verbal S/M. However, be forewarned, Sir; editing is something most authors need. Unless you choose to use an editing program or a 'live' editor, your future writing will probably be shredded worse than Enron's accounting records.
As always, I offer my email address so that anyone I review has the opportunity to reply both on this site and in private. I will reply to any email sent by the author. Peace. (4/10)
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peachmellon
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Jan 7, 2003 |
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i read the stories on this date and i like intense.. and YES it was intense.. ~smiles~~
i enjoyed reading the story and looking forward to reading more.
(8/10)
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