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The Picnic
Author: Wizard698
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(Added on Nov 26, 2000)
(This month 8943 readers) (Total 15819 readers) |
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Lover takes girlfriend for seculed picnic in mountains. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
| Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 19, 2005 |
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good reading could have been better (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Jonathan
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Aug 1, 2001 |
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I've always been of the opinion that second person perspective sucks and this
story didn't do much to alter that opinion. About half way through the viewpoint
is rather brutally wrenched into third person perspective (complete with dialog!),
but then pops back into second person. Fortunately, this story is so slowly paced
that it doesn't leave you dizzy the way this sort of nonsense usually does.
Unfortunately, this story is so slowly paced that you don't care. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Jim |
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Mar 20, 2001 |
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I thought it was great. Could have used company. (10/10)
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B |
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Jan 27, 2001 |
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Not bad. Story was a little sappy, and the characters were a bit too perfect
and a bit too trusting. At least I wasn't so distracted by poor grammar and
mispellings, as so often happens. A little long though. Decent Job Wizard. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
peetter |
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Dec 30, 2000 |
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I loved it. Wish it was me. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Wetone |
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Dec 8, 2000 |
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I loved this story, it made me so wet! Very erotic and romantic, but a tad long and some parts didn't seam necessary. I'd love for Wizard698 to continue the tale, perhaps a lovely lady is watching them from above and joins them.
Wetone (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Painfully_Yours |
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Nov 26, 2000 |
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I'm sorry, this is worse than bad. It sounded like somebody's hot chat, and they
weren't very good at it. Its too stiff. Felt like i was reading a laundry list. (1/10)
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