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Invite for Discipline
Author: Fire-Bird
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(Added on Mar 4, 2003)
(This month 102648 readers) (Total 144658 readers) |
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A popular schoolgirl is blackmailed to provide sexual services. |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Oct 20, 2003 |
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The story codes say it all.
These codes always make for GREAT stories (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Mar 15, 2003 |
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I must say that the ending (if Chapter 7 is the end, and it may not be) took me by surprise. My initial reaction was, "Neat!" But on re-reading the story, the surprise really doesn't seem to make any sense. The mysterious slave-master has a lot to lose, and risks everything time and again, putting himself in the power of a number of other people. At any moment, the girl could take off the blindfold and ruin everything.
Much of the story is told via flashbacks, (for which I have a great weakness myself). On the one hand I congratulate the author for daring to use a rather unusual technique in a novel way -- relating quite a lot of the story via a series of e-mails; but on the other, I think that a lot of the eroticism of the scenes is dissipated in the matter of fact way the slave-master recounts the adventures. But that's just my own take. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
peachmellon
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Mar 6, 2003 |
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i have read your stories before.. like the To OBey story.. i was looking for a little more here.. do you think perhaps you will be writing more to this story .. it is good but i am hopeing for more.. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Phoenix
(Edit) (Mar 6, 2003)
- Hi Peachmellon. Yes, there are more chapters to come. I guess I should have asked the webmaster to put out more than the first chapter. My fault I'm afraid. Keep an eye out for the next few chapters. I don't think you'll be disappointed.
Firebird.
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Powerone
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Mar 5, 2003 |
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I like my erotic stories to be erotic. The most sex in this story is a brief paragraph of what he was going to do. More of a newspaper story then an erotic story. (5/10)
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