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The Mysterious Redhead
Author: Hunters Fawn
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(Added on Mar 30, 2003)
(This month 9072 readers) (Total 19701 readers) |
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Charles Hampton walked the fogged streets of Whitechapel, and in a Lodging House, he discovers a secret that he's keep buried in the depths of his soul. He discovers a new world had opened for him. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 18, 2005 |
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just average at best (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
TERRANCE E SWAN
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Jul 13, 2003 |
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well done and very exciting. Nicely written. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Terry Gabriola
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Apr 2, 2003 |
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Yep, I'm another one who finds the screwed-up English seriously offputting in what might otherwise have been reasonable work. There are errors in every paragraph, some of them fairly crass ones too. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
anguisette
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Apr 1, 2003 |
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i must agree with the Master...this is extremely poorly written. "whelp" is a derogatory term for a child....not a "welt," as i am sure the author intended. it was a passably decent story otherwise; with work, i'm sure it could be well worth reading. lots of work... (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
RTNYMaster
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Mar 31, 2003 |
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Small errors? The writing was atrocious. Grammar, spelling, sentence structure and word usage all need a lot of work. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Mar 31, 2003 |
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This was an enjoyable story, and it would have earned a ten had there not been numerous small errors. Also, The beginning and end convey an "old-England" atmosphere, however the main part of the story rather loses that, especially with regards to the language. A olden-style language throughout would have greatly improved the story, I think. (8/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Mar 30, 2003 |
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This is a very nice story with excellent atmosphere and good characterization; unfortunately it is flawed by too many errors that more careful editing could easily have corrected.
"resembled wealth" should be "bespoke/(or represented) wealth" A pair of clumsy sentences -- "A person dressed in black cloak with a hood that covered the head of the person exiting the coach, and disappears into the Lodging House. He could tell how by the way they walked, and moved it had been a woman of class. "were the elegant lady" should be "where the elegant lady" "no where" should be "nowhere" "wet" should be "whet" etc etc
Aside from those mechanical (and easily avoidable) errors, I enjoyed the story a lot
(8/10)
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