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Lynne
Author: Just Another Bloke
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(Added on Jun 30, 2000)
(This month 337670 readers) (Total 536346 readers) |
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A very long slave training story, but it is also one of the best. After reading all 36 chapters, I still hope there are more :-D |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Jorgy444
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Sep 30, 2012 |
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Story was very erotic and well described the characters and scenes. Author has a publishable
story with intense proof reading and grammar fixes.
Would say that the first few chapters of the debauchery required by Lynne were so intense that
almost was over the top and unrealistic. Sorry,
can not give a 9 or 10 without better quality in
grammar and syntax. But a great read for eroticism and us perverts. (8/10)
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Sheepdog
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Dec 30, 2010 |
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While I concur with some of the comments below on the errors in the story, overall, it grabs your attention and is hard to put down due to the quality of the storytelling and the compelling frantic needs of the Main Character. If re-written and if some of the other characters were better developed, this could compare with published work. Good read, overall. (9/10)
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JimmyJump
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Feb 1, 2009 |
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Dual feelings again for this story. From the standpoint of the avid reader of 'good' erotic BDSM fiction, this story more than quenches one's thirst for the outrageous and perverse. For it is deliciously lush and has a wonderfully wicked and pliable main character in the form of Lynne, who is more than willing to let herself be forced into debauchery, like a pig likes to grovel in the muddy dirt. Most of the time, the story is inspired, well written, imaginative and inventive.
From the standpoint of the purist, however, this story makes one's skin crawl. For it is packed with faults, errors and mistakes of every variety imaginable. It switches tenses, often in the same sentence, it switches POV, there's words missing, and there's plenty of errors in syntax, grammar and spelling. At times, the story is even tedious, flat, uninspired and full-out boring.
So, what do you do with such a story? Do you make a list with its pro's and con's ? Do you deny you've ever read it?
Do you howl with the wolves and go along with them in their praise?
Or do you play Siskel and Ebert and dig a deep hole where-in you dump the story, after having trampled on it and trashed it thoroughly?
I am going to do neither. I am going to follow my deepest innermost feelings. Those that prevailed while reading. Which is a bit the same as that pro's and con's list, come to think of it.
So, after ample consideration and lots of conversations with my darker half, I'm gonna go for the praise bit, and grant this story its maximum score.
Although I think that the whole thing should be re-written to weed-out the errors.
JJ (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Voracious Reader
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Dec 28, 2007 |
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Been a while since I read this one, but it is a great story. Since it has been seven years, I don't think any further chapters are coming, though! Still and all a very good story. (9/10)
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oldfart1248
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Jan 2, 2007 |
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Enjoyed the psychology of it. Look forward to more chapters! (10/10)
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mavuong
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Nov 30, 2005 |
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yes , i like it . Thanks (10/10)
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waterbaby75
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Nov 20, 2005 |
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I couldn't stop reading, I read it all night. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Sir Kevinhard
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Sep 12, 2005 |
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A genius at work - with a brilliant twist at the end.
I usually don't bother to give reviews. However, this story, perhaps in an edited form (more concise, less repetitive), can and should become a classic. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lobi
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Aug 27, 2005 |
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I wish for more chapters...could not stop reading (9/10)
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Damon13
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Jun 29, 2005 |
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nice! entertaining and very enjoyable. long, but had to stick to ít!!!!
sometimes a little repetitive and lenghy, also really a little black and white, but hey...
Nevertheless it has some kind of development of story and characters going on, which is not often found in the stories here! Stylewise no great work of art, but very nice to read, perfect style for what it is supposed to be: go entertainment.
one of the best free ones of the 'genre' Ive read!!!!
definitively a MUST READ! (9/10)
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mkemse
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Jun 19, 2004 |
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YES!!!!!!!!!!! (9/10)
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gentlerose
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Apr 18, 2004 |
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Very well done. It kept my interest throughout and I loved it. One of the things I loved best about it was how the woman weren't forced into this, but did it because of their own needs. Thank you. (10/10)
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gojack10
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Apr 9, 2004 |
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It was a mediocre tale with a half way decent presentation. So I gave it a 6. (6/10)
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sunkist-rox-my-
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Mar 12, 2004 |
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It was a very long story but it kept you drawn in. The ending was excellent, and the story was well though out. (9/10)
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scromobile
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Nov 10, 2003 |
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Great story, wonderful plot. (10/10)
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tamerlan
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Dec 31, 2002 |
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one of the best stories I ever read (10/10)
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colk
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Feb 13, 2002 |
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why this end? (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
the_min
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Oct 23, 2001 |
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Interesting story, but lacks character idendification and never should it end as it did.If she knew what she was then she should have remained as such. (7/10)
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Madame
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May 4, 2001 |
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A really amazing story which I didn't want to stop. I enjoyed the plot, variety and everything else. I would suggest some proofreading though. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
me |
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Mar 22, 2001 |
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good stuff (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
ted myg |
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Feb 11, 2001 |
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a well written story for this sort.
but ending should not be happy story. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Elizabeth |
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Jan 4, 2001 |
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After reading all these wonderful reviews I've thought the story must be exceptional. But it plainly sucked! Bad writing, boring plot and no characterization at all. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
tedmyg |
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Dec 17, 2000 |
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Very exciting story I love it.
But ending seems strange that Lynne would not be
happy with reunion of normal family.
Please remake the story so that Lynne would not or
never be return as normal wife but stays as whore. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
John |
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Nov 18, 2000 |
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hot, hot story! (10/10)
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Suzi |
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Nov 14, 2000 |
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Very interesting story. My only complaint is the misuse of some words -- a little proof-reading would have made those glaring errors stop detracting from the story. Otherwise, it was an fast-paced read. It was a story I just had to finish! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
MILLE Gilbert |
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Oct 26, 2000 |
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Magnifique! Des situations de soumission psychologique ¨¤ couper le souffle, l'¨¦rotisme ¨¤ l'¨¦tat pur!. une suite ?Magnificent! Situations of psychological submission to cut the breath, the eroticism to the pure state. A continuation ? (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mark&Wendy |
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Oct 24, 2000 |
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We read some of this story on a ng some time ago, and we're lucky enough to stumble across this site. Now we can read the full story. Few stories are worth chasing around for but this one certainly is. Thank you to the author and the owner of this site. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Good-Girl-Sometimes. |
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Oct 22, 2000 |
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A friend showed me this story, once I started reading it I couldn't stop. More PLEASE Sir ? (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
David |
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Oct 15, 2000 |
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Sucked. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Jason |
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Oct 15, 2000 |
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Just thought it was bad. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Baer-chen |
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Oct 4, 2000 |
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Usually don't like this type, but this was outstanding. Nice. (10/10)
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Painfully_Yours |
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Sep 22, 2000 |
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This story Rocked! I couldn't get enought of it! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Vicki |
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Sep 15, 2000 |
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I couldn't wait to show this story to my Master...it is truly a work of art. Both Master and I were hooked from chapter one. I truly hope that there will be more to come, just as I did reading it. :-) (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Kim |
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Sep 13, 2000 |
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I wouldn't normally rate any story 10/10, but this story is an exception. It's like 10 quality stories in one. It truly is an exceptional story. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Engineer |
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Sep 8, 2000 |
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The author was not only laborious, but also creative. Very much fascinating situations, described with knowledge and virtue. An interesting story plot with many amazing turns. Unfortunately, sometimes a little bit exaggerated, even involving sex with animals. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
ABrunetteWoman |
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Aug 28, 2000 |
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An amazing story. The quality of the writing makes it so much more enjoyable. This story gave me more orgasms than most men I've been with :-) (10/10)
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Brocky |
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Aug 27, 2000 |
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I read this story some time ago in a newsgroup. It's GREAT to be able to read it again in full. It really is a class above any other sex stories I've read. If you haven't read it, you're missing out on a GREAT story. I really can't recommend this story highly enough. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Todd |
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Aug 27, 2000 |
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Awesome story. Well written, imaginative. Just great. More stories like this would be good. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
TJ. |
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Aug 20, 2000 |
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Quite simply the best sex story I've ever read. As well written as many main-stream Novels. Absolutely Brilliant ! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
heavenlee |
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Aug 15, 2000 |
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i read this story a couple of months ago, after immediately getting hooked on the first chapter. It seemed that i couldn't get enough, night after night my eyes were glued to the monitor. The story had a unique twist to it, with some really "hot" scenes, however, more importantly, there really was a love story at the core of it all. i give this story the highest rating possible. In my estimation, while the author definitely has a mind for some really steamy sex, he also conveyed a real love for Lynne. ( ^_^ ) (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
daxstone |
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Aug 8, 2000 |
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an excelent involving story and I for one am glad it's still around to enjoy (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dave |
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Jul 31, 2000 |
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Been around too long. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Steve Moore |
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Jul 1, 2000 |
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A fully developed character that you can care about her outcome. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
xtreme |
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Jun 30, 2000 |
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Exclent story. Very detailed and nice surprising ending. lots of ideas. (9/10)
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