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Forcetron
Author: johnny payne
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(Added on Sep 7, 2003)
(This month 23274 readers) (Total 45267 readers) |
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Sociopathic husband sadistically punishes trophy wife and mistress. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
LordVetinari
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Jun 23, 2005 |
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Good, hardcore torture. A bit repetitive, but simple and brutal. (7/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 29, 2005 |
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showed great promise from the synopsis but slowly went nowhere after that (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Emily
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Sep 24, 2003 |
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This story seems to need more development. It is excessive and overdone. It seems to roll on and on and on in a neverending loop of similar ideas waiting and even begging for a chance to develop elsewhere. (5/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Sep 11, 2003 |
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This story has saucer-sized aureoles (?), a 13' (?) cock and altogether too much 'meat' for this reader.
It does have lots of imaginative intensity and nastiness, though, which suggests that the author is capable of a much better effort. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
bobanddianne
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Sep 9, 2003 |
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Very good beginning to a new story. A bit harsh in spots, hope it continues... good opportunities for development. (9/10)
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lex ludite
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Sep 8, 2003 |
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Way too much of a good thing! The writing is on the florid side, sort of stream of consciousness, which gets in the way of progress at times. I personally like simple declarative sentences, but I guess that's my hangup. The violence is mindless in the extreme with no rationale that I can find. The victims are totally unbelievable, a pair of blowup dolls who absorb incredible pain without protest for reasons that are very poorly justified. High marks for heat, but that's about all I can say for it in a positive sense. As with the author's previous effort, this one seems to just lose its direction and peters out. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Dee Driscoll
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Sep 8, 2003 |
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This reads almost like a parody at places. I appreciate the obsessive repetition of the same details over and over, the excess of descriptions but it becomes self-defeating at places. A lot of details are exaggerated beyond believability which, accompanied with language burdened with attributes and references adds a layer of surrealistic playfulness to the story. This playfulness, although I am not sure this was the actual intention, is in one way the story's main quality. However, it also takes away from the seriousness and plausability. There are some minor typing mistakes, which is not a big problem; more of a problem lies in the use of tense, switching between present and past is not done in the best imaginable way. On top of this, the characters need more depth, more insight in their minds and spirits, this way we only get the description of torture and the description of motives/ reactions, not much in the way of actually telling the story. Which, with acceptable enough storyline might have added to be more than it is in this version. (6/10)
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