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A Mistress/slave Beautiful Relationship
Author: slvWriting
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(Added on Oct 5, 2003)
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This story tries to tell what could well be everyday situations between a female Dom / male sub in a loving relationship. |
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Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
theladystouch
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Feb 21, 2008 |
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High quality writing with excellent dialogue. The story-telling is cohesive and progresses in a logical manner. Very enjoyable read. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 14, 2006 |
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good story justto repetitive from similar themes, to many Mistress/slaves stories post every where (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Missy Moomoo
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Apr 27, 2004 |
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A lovely read. Very enjoyable. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
abitbent
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Oct 28, 2003 |
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I enjoyed the innocence and reality of this read. This scenario could be very typical and is probably a relationship that many sub males would die for. The part about getting fisted on the second encounter was a little bit "out there" but what they heck, it's fiction.
Good read, I recommend it. This story does support my theory though, that it's virtually impossible to write a D/s story without using the word "handiwork". It's a pet peeve of mine, and I didn't get far into the story before I found it.
Resist! Resist!
Synonyms: achievement, art, artefact, artifact, artisanship, calling, craft, craftsmanship, creation, design, invention, m�tier, product, production, profession, result, skill, trade, vocation, workmanship (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 28, 2003)
- Thank you for your kind review. I agree that fisting may be a little bit "out there", but it's a personal fetish of mine, so I included it anyway :-)
About the word "handiwork", I hadn't realize that what you say is so very true! I'll try to refrain from using it in any new stories I write
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| Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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Oct 27, 2003 |
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I read this story when it was first posted, and I�ve read it again just now.
To Woodsman�s game�s credit, none of the author�s style and feel has been lost in the editing. I noted none of the hot dialog has been dropped either. Oh yes, this author sure knows how to make the character�s words sizzle on the screen. Experience perhaps?
On the nit picky side, I thought some sentences were a bit cluttered. Extra words, to me anyway, don�t always mean a better read. e.g. � �my last and current girlfriend, with whom I had and have a relationship of profound love.. � perhaps might have read more smoothly as �my current girlfriend, who I have a profoundly loving relationship with�� There were a few places I felt were like this, others however may disagree.
Overall its a good read, with good insight into a loving bdsm relationship. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 27, 2003)
- Thank you so much for the kind words! As for woodman's game editing, she did a really great job and I can't thank her enough for taking the time to do it.
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| Reviewer:
Emily
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Oct 12, 2003 |
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This story did generate heat and shows this writer has good promise for the future. Despite the incomplete sentences and cumbersome nature of this work I did enjoy it. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 25, 2003)
- It's been edited now, probably it can be read better now
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Oct 6, 2003 |
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Not bad really, I guess because it is a translation, the text does not flow quite right to make it more enjoyable to read. Anyway, I would not mind reading a continuation. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
slvWriting
(Edit) (Oct 8, 2003)
- Thanks for taking the time to review it. It would be great if you'd let me know particularly where it doesn't flow right so I can see if I can make it better
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