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Caught in the Act
Author: maid jennifer
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(Added on Oct 29, 2003)
(This month 17836 readers) (Total 52075 readers) |
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The day I was caught by my best friend and whathe did to me. Then being caught by his mom while he was using me and what she did. |
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Average (?):  (5/10) |
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
emmacd
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Dec 11, 2004 |
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IT is quite different in reallife experiences. Emmacd (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 18, 2004 |
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Good reading ,liked the story need towork more on grammar and other aspects of the story, for a 1st, if it is, you did great (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
sm4hg
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Nov 29, 2003 |
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The story isn't all bad, but the writing lacks grammar and writing skills. Try to write like it's a story, not some kind of cheap comic. And PLEASE check your story-codes!
Now that I've read part two I still find you didn't slow down. That's ok for that story because you started it like that. But in future try to write more detailed, much slower, perhaps with more chapters. But keep on writing! (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Adam_T
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Nov 1, 2003 |
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very good first effort, part 2 should be good (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
RubbrSpatula
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Oct 31, 2003 |
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...try, try again.
This is an okay story with a so-so delivery and many grammar errors. But it's still better than being unpublished! (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Moggy
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Oct 30, 2003 |
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All the usual faults of first time writer/contributors are evident in this story: Lack of proofreading and far too quick pacing for example. (3/10)
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