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Picnic
Author: kittenfemme
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(Added on Nov 2, 2003)
(This month 20300 readers) (Total 34145 readers) |
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A Domme and her submissive prepare for a midsummer picnic. |
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Weighed
Average (?): (8/10) |
Average
Rating: (8.5/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
Rating: (4/10) |
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Reviewer:
BigCat
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Sep 13, 2005 |
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Superb. Hitchcockian in its tension built on everyday, normal occurences but the mood created is one on threat, something ominous. Brilliant touch with the woman with green eyes and family in the parking lot and overall a insightful and incisive exploration of a submissive's inner reality. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jan 7, 2004 |
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Nicely written, hope there is more to come (9/10)
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Reviewer:
Zen
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Nov 22, 2003 |
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This is your best work!!! I have not read nothing by you that is this good!!! I'm writing your mistress to say more!!! (10/10)
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Reviewer:
Alex Bragi
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Nov 5, 2003 |
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To me this didn’t feel unfinished at all, its just a very lovely vignette of a submissive and her Domme. I can sum it up in three words - simple, short, and sweet. (8/10)
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Reviewer:
Shellyfemme
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Nov 5, 2003 |
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I enjoy this story from begining to the end. kittenfemme did a wonderful job exploring the mind of the submissive. Whether or not the story is finshed i rated it a 9 because it was very enjoyable and well written. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
Merc1255
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Nov 3, 2003 |
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Half a story. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
Xue Lan
(Edit) (Nov 7, 2003)
- This is less than half a review. It says part one, ya? But this shows how everyone has different tastes and expectations.
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Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
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Nov 3, 2003 |
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A masterful example of how to illustrate the Master/slave relationship. The author totally uses the mind game to explore the slaves feelings, not an item of clothing is removed, not a square inch of skin is bruised and yet the mood is set. One proviso - no ten until more is posted. I must see them frolic in the park. I want to be there when they get home. Final note. Forty years ago I had a half beagle, half terrier who loved bell peppers. Haven't haven't had a dog since that liked them half so much. (9/10)
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