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Tali's Training
Author: justin benedict
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(Added on Jan 9, 2004)
(This month 55430 readers) (Total 73651 readers) |
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Lovely D.A. is trained by Fenton, the Felon! |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Feb 1, 2004 |
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I thought that this story had some of the crispest prose and clever dialogue I've seen in a long time, beginning with this priceless sentence in the first paragraph -- "She looked so out of place in a beige business suit—like a cheerleader who'd mugged Steve Forbes." /// Only the (IMO) unlikeliness of such a consensual relationship between the two principal characters keeps me from awarding this fine story the Big Casino. Very nicely written. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
justincbenedict
(Edit) (Feb 1, 2004)
- That was a fabulous review! Thanks so much. Truly, the relationship between Fenton and Tali is unlikely, but I guess maybe I'm trying to be the Donald E.Westlake of porn...thanks again!
justincbenedict@yahoo.com
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| Reviewer:
Faibhar
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Jan 16, 2004 |
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Aside from some confusing syntax, e.g. paragraphs, "sounds", etc, "TT" is well developed with charcters that tend to balance one another in expected ways. A guest that evening, Don, has both second thoughts and lusty urges.
For any wishing to understand power exchange/ district attorney motivations this story is written by a fine writer and sure to make most shout out Objection! in the best possible way. (7/10)
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mkemse
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Jan 14, 2004 |
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Just wish it was NC (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
isolomon
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Jan 11, 2004 |
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Very nice for a short story. Hopefully we'll have the prequel posted soon.
Also story is written in English. The insanely bad English used in some stories is a pet peeve. (9/10)
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