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He Let Her Know Too Much
Author: Mind Prison
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(Added on Feb 1, 2004)
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Eric's obsession with female domination and bondage has been growing inside since he was a kid. However, he could never quite convince the girls he was dating to play along......... Until now.. His new girlfried has a plan to use his obsession to gain control. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 27, 2005 |
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it was ok nothing spectacular (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Enos Quill
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Feb 26, 2004 |
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Pro writers often say that they always put a story away for a week or so (or longer) and edit again with fresh eyes before submitting it. Something I am just now learning. So this story needs editing, BUT, this author knows how to tell a story and that makes reading this enjoyable even if there are grammatical and plot mistakes. (7/10)
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bracemaiden
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Feb 11, 2004 |
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It was an amusing read dispite the oops'es, with the Mistress alternating between caring and enjoying the slave’s discomfort. A part 2 might prove quite interesting. (7/10)
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abitbent
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Feb 2, 2004 |
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I did notice the syntax error as well with the gag. Had to re-read because I thought I was missing something. Still, the content was good and the author's heart is in the right place with this story. I'm not much for humiliation, but I'm really looking forward to future chapters. (8/10)
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trainmanretep
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Feb 1, 2004 |
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good idea, but writing is really quite poor and inconsistant - see other review. A suggetion for the next chapters, write it, read it, read it again and again and you will see each time where you can make some improvements. Don't rely on spellcheck. I wont pick up wrong application of a word if it is spelled correctly. (3/10)
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bdsmbill
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Feb 1, 2004 |
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This one has a lot of proff reading problems that get in the way of the story. Just one example: She locks a gag on him and then holds a conversation with him. At the end of the conversation she again locks a gag in place. I guess the first one didn't work. (5/10)
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