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Housemaids Kneeds
Author: Hajim
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(Added on Feb 6, 2004)
(This month 13978 readers) (Total 34333 readers) |
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Dominant wants a housekeeper,advertises and gets 2 girls. He takes them to a lonely cottage for training. |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Feb 10, 2004 |
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I liked it a little better than my esteemed fellow reviewer B. I agree that it was a bit to mechanical, but not terrible. (7/10)
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boccaccio2000g
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Feb 8, 2004 |
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Just OK. The writing is not bad, but the characters are thinly drawn. Worse, to my taste, is the fact that the author rushes through the BDSM moments:<br>and I gave her a good spanking ///<br>and I gave her a longer thrashing than Angela had had ///<br>so I gave 10 lashes with the whip across her tits ///<br> and gave her a very severe thrashing ///<br>and gave her 10 lashes on each tit and 10 on her cunt. ///<br>It's a bit like reading a mail-order catalog -- nice subject matter matter, but it's all a bit cut and dried. <br>In my opinion writing erotic stories is a little like sex; one should not rush things. One should take the time to build a sense of anticipation (whether of pleasure and excitement, or of pain and fear) and take a moment afterward to bask in the moment. One doesn't need to describe every single blow to arouse an interested reader, but usually describing at least a few of them in more detail (from the point of view of the striker or the strikee, or both) will enhance the pleasure of the reader. IMO. (6/10)
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