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The Bank Manager
Author: littlebro_969
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(Added on Feb 11, 2004)
(This month 117208 readers) (Total 255102 readers) |
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Woman in mid 40's is manager of a bank looking for secret BDSM excitement by another woman. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (5/10) |
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Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
tina.matthews
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Jul 30, 2005 |
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+Good storyline
+Good Pace
-Poor composition and discription.
-Imagination is excellent but putting it in words needs to be worked on.
Why a 7? Well I liked it a lot and read the whole of it in one go and by the end of it lost count of my orgasms (*giggle*)
Good Job done! Dont be disheartened by the 1's and 1/2's. Remember the story where the painter put his painting by the road and a pen by it for people to mark out the mistakes? By evening there were only marks and none of the painting could be seen. The next day the painter put another copy of the same at the same place and placed colours and a brush with it for people to fix it. By evening there wasent a single brush stroke on his master piece!!
And please people, lay off me!Dont go biting at me like you did to Master Chris! :-P
Love & Peace
Tina (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Apr 15, 2005 |
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I liked the fact that the paragraphs were short and to the point. However mixing all the play into one story start to make the story a bit more difficult to read. The concept is great but I think it would be better if the author break the story into mulitple stories. (6/10)
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uksubtoilet
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Mar 8, 2005 |
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this is an excellent story please write some more (10/10)
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whackdog
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Jan 13, 2005 |
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Has potential on many levels for exciting chapters (8/10)
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mkemse
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Apr 15, 2004 |
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i hope there is more to come and that future chpaters are longer, no much to go on here, as the story goes on, i will update the review, now it just keep s getting better raising from a 4 to a 9 on thr rating (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
buskeyTR
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Mar 25, 2004 |
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This is a very good start to this F/F D/S humil story. I hope that littlebro_969 makes this a very long story. (8/10)
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merseyman
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Mar 7, 2004 |
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I can only be thankful that the first part was one page long and none of my time was wasted reading anymore. Has to be the worst story I have read on this site. Rating is, I suspect somewhat flattering. (1/10)
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Kostly
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Mar 5, 2004 |
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Try Describing and not telling what happened. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
Equalizer
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Feb 26, 2004 |
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Has to be the shortest 'story' on the site. Didn't even fill my computer screen. Took barely a minute to read. Pointless. (1/10)
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- Replied by:
Equalizer
(Edit) (Feb 26, 2004)
- After the update I decided to change my rating from 2 to 1.
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Feb 20, 2004 |
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Pointless drivel. I agree entirely with Jacen's review. (1/10)
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e.e. norcod
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Feb 19, 2004 |
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Out of hundreds of reviews that I have written I have never given a one before but this is the very worst story I have ever had the misfortune to read. I guess what really set me off is the overtone (possibly perceived rather than real) that this story was presented by an African American. I have written stories (not on this site) with "Black" characters and believe me they are extremely difficult characters to write (or to get into the head of metaphorically). Although I realize that dialect is one of the most difficult things to write, I find this story insulting and demeaning to most readers and a whole group of people. There, having gotten that off my chest I feel better. But the story still gets a one. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Jacen
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Feb 15, 2004 |
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One page story, yet FILLED with errors, horrid english and.... well, a lack of anything that makes a story a story. Even if the story is updated more, why bother? It will just be more of the same. Now, if this story was written by a 15 year old, then... no, no slack there either. I've met six year olds with more writing skills. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Faibhar
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Feb 13, 2004 |
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After reading this story one need never fret over the definitions of things like masochism, grammar, etc. With following chapters hopefully things can only get better. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Master_chris
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Feb 13, 2004 |
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Great beginning, I can't wait for the next posting of the story (7/10)
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- Replied by:
C_Lakewood
(Edit) (Feb 24, 2004)
- I just don't understand your rating and review.
Sarcasm, perhaps?
- Replied by:
merseyman
(Edit) (Mar 7, 2004)
- I must agree with Lakewood. I can only think that you are 'taking the mickey'
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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Not a very good effort so far. It really lacks in all respects. Not sure if there is a story that is going to come out of this or if it will be a series of short scenes. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Feb 12, 2004 |
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This was sad. To start with, it was well under the 10k size that is supposed to be minimum. What was there was poorly written with no discernible story. Even though short, there was still time for errors like a gagged woman still able to beg verbally. I think this may be the lowest review I ever gave. (2/10)
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