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Holy Sex Slavers
Author: Omega Phallic
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(Added on Apr 19, 2004)
(This month 23762 readers) (Total 40168 readers) |
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Loric is an a novice priest of Moslar, God/dess of Rape and pervesion, trying gain full priesthood by raping and enslaving others. |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
BrazenBitch
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Apr 21, 2004 |
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hard to rate. good premise, but could be much written better. and the writer definitely shows the ability to be able to do so. and please, in future AVOID the word "melons" when talking about breasts, tits, etc! (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Omega Phallic
(Edit) (Apr 22, 2004)
- What do you got against melons?
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Apr 21, 2004 |
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Gotta agree with Powerone. Not just spell checking, but missing words and wrong ones. Writing needs more time spent; expand the ideas with more description, better character development. In this form, the story does not stimulate or excite. Try reading some of the works of llabmik, or Powerone; look for the way stories like "The Mansion" by Mad Dog or "New World Order" by sybersim are written. The stories are kind of like this type, yet descriptions are richer, you walk in the fears of the victims, etc. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
WackySpurtz
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Apr 19, 2004 |
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I hate this 'style' of stringing cliche and thoughtless vulgarity together in such a nonsensual manner. What is the point, since it is neither a good story nor sexually stimulating? It's not that the editting is bad, or that the writing is less than sensational, it's simply that there is so little reason to even be writing down such nonsense at all.
<<Orgasms racked Pointy's body as Kora violated the 18 year old priestess. If
she had know that sex slavery was this good than she would have begged her
relatives to sell her to a whore house after she had became a priestess of
Thorn. She had became such a cock hungry bitch now, thanks to her collar, that
she would have begged her own father to fuck her throat so that she could drink
own father's salty sperm.>> (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Apr 19, 2004 |
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"I'm a writer that likes feed back from requests to Kudos".
What about the critics. Knew I shouldn't have read the story when the synopsis had two errors in it. Story didn't get much better. Seems the author forgot where he put the spell checker.
Didn't care too much for the story either.
(5/10)
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