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I Was Just Trying To Help
Author: SpeechMasterOne
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(Added on Jul 7, 2004)
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She was just trying to help her step-daughter open up, but the results left her in a helpless situation. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Martiniman
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Dec 11, 2011 |
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Highly erotic story! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rhonda
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I love the premise. Well written and a nice idea, but could definately be expanded. The story is well laid out and very logical as a means to an end for the girl to control her young step mother.
But the end of the story leaves wanting more. It could definately use a second and possibly a third chapter to carry the story forward. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bullfinch
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Jan 31, 2008 |
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very good. please continue the story. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Dec 17, 2004 |
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I must say that I agree with ms2bused -- though
I must point out that the story could have been
more carefully proofed. I probably would have
given it an 8 had it not been for the author's
response to Lex's review. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 1, 2004 |
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WOW, what can i say, well written, well thought out, well done period (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
nhmass
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Jul 11, 2004 |
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One of the best stories I've read on the site. Look forward to the author posting more of his work including more chapters to this story. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
jbowler65
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Jul 9, 2004 |
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Very good and enjoyable story. Hopefully the author will be able to add a second chapter or story to this one. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mantis
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Jul 9, 2004 |
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Good stuff with a pleasingly original take on an otherwise familiar - and much loved - theme. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
ms2bused
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Jul 9, 2004 |
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Ever since you wrote of the Mayor and her assistant, I have been an avid fan oy this writer! He/she specialiazes in 'Orgasm-denial' which I personnally think is one of the most erotically stimulating scenarios there can be; most especially when the dictatorial one is a younger woman then the submissive! I adore the way they are always blackmailed into total submission then are used to the nth degree! My only negative thought is that this writer does not produce stories continually for I would never ever grow weary of them! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
VaVaVoom
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Jul 8, 2004 |
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What can i say, i cant wait for the next chapter, its great so far, keep up the good work! (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Jul 7, 2004 |
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The writing is very good, there is sufficient background to set the stage for what happens and there is certainly a generous amount of heat coupled with bondage for those into such things. It is unfortunate that Kristina just is not convincing to this reader. A 16 year old genius into dominance and all manner of kinky things does not ring true, nor is her ability to reduce a grown woman to a mindless sex slave in the blink of an eye. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
SpeechMastr
(Edit) (Jul 7, 2004)
- Lex, Thanks for the feedback. This story originated with the intriguing notion that an introverted, hyper-intelligent girl would discover the world of BDSM thorugh the death of her mother. She might be drawn to a private place to explore this world upon herself. Once she feels she has command of this world, she exercises that control on somebody she can uniquely manipulate, with the cool efficiency that is reflective in her father's success.
Then again, this is fiction, so let the reader beware.
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