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The Roommate
Author: littlebro_969
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(Added on Sep 3, 2004)
(This month 89088 readers) (Total 191919 readers) |
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Lynn is a freshman just starting college and she becomes the slave of her roommate. |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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Rating: (6.5/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
jrnd711
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Sep 11, 2008 |
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It seems to me that a story ranking near the top for overall popularity deserves better than very low ratings. If you enjoy a story forget about all the technical penalties you can deliver, and give the writer credit deserved for hard work on your behalf. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Feb 15, 2006 |
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all your stories are good, the only issue i have is most of the chapters in each a way to short, would make better reading if you had longer chapters, but that us the author's choice (8/10)
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christhesub
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Nov 15, 2004 |
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I liked reading this story a lot and look forward to reading more. I agree with the other people who said that it could use a good looking over for grammer and spelling. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
pooja
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Nov 14, 2004 |
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u write a verygood story.i wanna read more humilating the characters in detailed.u may write it in a seductive way (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Nov 1, 2004 |
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littlebro 969,
You have many creative and interesting ideas about tortures for your characters, however you still need an editor who cares enough to correct things, rebuild your sentences and paragraphs, and help with using the correct words. Peaking and peeking are not the same. (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Malice
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Sep 7, 2004 |
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I found it an interesting little read, I hope to see further just what will happen to the main character. There are flaws in the writing, and grammar, but at least with me that is all forgiveable in the light of some of the creativity. A great deal of stories these days seem all together too much following the winning (at least in some opinions) formula.
My suggestion would be to take you time with it, and try not to take to heart too much what some of the more harsh reviewers are saying. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
bdsmbill
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Sep 7, 2004 |
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This author has a lively imagination, but needs to work on the fundamentals of how to write. A carpenter has to know how to use his saws and other tools, and a writer has to know how to use the language. You should have paid attention in English class. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
pervtex
(Edit) (Nov 14, 2004)
- You are right on. I tried to read some of the story but was so distracted by the errors I couldn't enjoy it. I hope this writer gets an editor soon. She does have a good imagination.
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Sep 6, 2004 |
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A typical Littlebro production: all implausible,
badly written description. The one saving grace
is that it's short. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
crickette
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Sep 6, 2004 |
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Not a bad start. I hope this is leading up to a new career path for Lynn. She does always seem to be in the right place at the right time and grossed out or not she admits it 'gets her off' for lack of a better term. The story is very detailed and very descriptive and has a pretty good pace. What ever Lynn's role is going to be it needs to surface soon. If it doesn't the story will start to drag, in my opinionand seem like a film that is stuck on one scence that keeps repeating over and over.
(6/10)
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