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Cawnpore
Author: Williej
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(Added on Oct 2, 2004)
(This month 24028 readers) (Total 52640 readers) |
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A buxom young indian woman is captured by a renegade British Army division during the Great Mutiny in 1858 and subjected to a severe sentence of corporal punishment focused on her breasts. |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Jan 25, 2009 |
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Very nice depiction, very well written.
JJ (9/10)
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pollyanna
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Jun 14, 2005 |
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My favorite story so far on this site. Very well written, good historical references, and the torture and abuse descriptions are first rate. Reading about whipped breasts and non-consensual tight bondage, especially breast bondage, excites me like no other. I really look forward to a continuation of this story, or a new one by this author. (10/10)
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chksng19
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Oct 5, 2004 |
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You'll excuse me a minute, I'm a little out of breath from reading the first part of the story.
(Several deep inhales of air. Pulse slowing a little. Flush leaving cheeks.)
Great story, especially the good detail and exposition of the historical setting. Lots of horrible torture, and lots of good stuff yet to come, I'm sure.
This might be a little stiff for some folks, but I'm anxious to see the rest. And have the moderator remove that miscellaneous below the
"to be continued".
Very well written. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
boccaccio2000g
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Oct 3, 2004 |
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I read Breanne's review and agree that finding part of another story in the middle of this one detracted from the continuity more than a little. On the other hand, since it was an excerpt from my alter ego Big Jake's "Lash of the Desperados" I was rather flattered. ;-) I think that parts of "Cawnpore" were beautifully done, and I'm gratified if my work may have played a role in inspiring what began as such a fine story. The exposition of the historical setting is excellent, there's a good description of Rani's exotic attire (I always find exotic raiment somewhat difficult to describe and am always tempted to dispense with it at the first opportunity!), and a very intense 'thrill scene'. I would add that the dialogue is perhaps a bit weaker than the descriptive passages -- and not, to my non-British ears, particularly British-sounding. But certainly not bad. /// And one little personal quirk of mine -- I don't care for the use of the word 'huge' with the word 'breasts', but I may well be udderly outnumbered in that respect. Big, lush, opulent, full, ripe, large, luscious, majestic, splendid, imposing, jutting, mouthwatering, yes. Huge, no. Go figure. /// Anyway, Willie, I'm sure your new-found fans would appreciate it if you re-check your text carefully and re-submit a clean copy (not only is the passage from "Lash" in there, but some of your own passages are repeated as well in the latter part of the story). But the editorial problems notwithstanding, this was a very fine effort for a first-time writer. Looking forward to even better things in the future. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
williej
(Edit) (Dec 27, 2004)
- Many thanks for the review. It is an honour to be scored 9 by the master. Apologies for the editing screw-up. I accidentally uploaded an earlier draft which had an except from your 'Lash'. I had been looking for some inspiration and ideas to enrich the descriptions of the whipping. So often I run out of variations, adjectives, metaphors etc. I also take on board your comments on the word 'huge' as applied to wome's breasts. I guess I have my own vision of what that conjures up but it's a pretty coarse word and there are many others more appropriate. I don't have much time to write but I am encouraged by your words and will endeavout to complete soon.
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Breannefun
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Oct 3, 2004 |
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Rating this one was difficult, since the story editing was messed up. I suggest that the author repost the story, since part of another story was accidentally put in with this one, and the real story unfinished. But placing that aside, I loved it. Rani's torture was so unique, so horrible, and yet so sexual. The descriptions were excellent. Repost since I want to read the rest please. (9/10)
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