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Bully Training
Author: justin benedict
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(Added on Nov 17, 2004)
(This month 65565 readers) (Total 83005 readers) |
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Roy's domme wife invites the bully who persecuted him as a child to assist with his slave training! |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
makito
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Feb 8, 2005 |
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Absulutely marvelous. Please keep up this work. (10/10)
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hmverrrr
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Dec 16, 2004 |
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I have to agree with the lex's review in many ways. But first, let me say it kept my interest <cough> for the most part. It was a long story, and did repeat sometimes - I suppose being so long it is hard to re-read objectively, and as lex said, adding extra characters wasn't neccesary.
There was more in it than the story codes said, a bit of TV or cbt, but maybe not enough or expanded on to warrant a specific code. The initial premise was a brilliant base for the story :-) but it tailed off, almost like this long drawn out comment... Thanks for writing it justin.
(7/10 because it was worth reading, if a little long). (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
lex ludite
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Nov 27, 2004 |
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This could have been much better if it had been shorter. There are way too many characters running around doing the same things to other characters who are redundant as well. The original three characters and their relationship was well drawn. Once Pamela was introduced from out of the blue, to I guess spice things up, the story got out of control and went into the ditch. Despite all of this carping the author can generate heat when the occasion calls for it,which is a good thing. On the other hand the editing was terrible. Why is it that many authors who post on this site think its against the law to at least reread what they think they wrote and make the necessary corrections? I as a reader have some tolerance for distractions, but if too much time is spent mentally making the corrections that the author should have made, something else in the story is likly to suffer, such as my interest in reading further. (5/10)
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