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Jennie
Author: Pen_Telme
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(Added on Nov 19, 2004)
(This month 10778 readers) (Total 20778 readers) |
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Jennie is a nurse who gets abducted from the parking lot of where she works and ends up being humiliated and degraded by a wealthy man who wants her for his playtoy and that of his friends. |
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Average (?):  (4.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
(Edit) |
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Nov 22, 2004 |
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I agree with Powerone here. Note that, even in
the two replies, Pen Telme is ungrammatical and
badly in need of a spell-check. In my view, any
writer who posts a slip-shod story is lazy and
disrespectful towards his readers. Pen Telme is
by no means the worst writer on this site, but,
still....
(2/10)
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| Reviewer:
"Roof"
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Nov 20, 2004 |
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This, the story of the captive nurse, is well worth reading. Nurses have always been a turn-on for me, particularly when shapely and young. In this story, Jennie is going to unwillingly serve the men who have entered her life. She needs all the "remedial attitude adjustment" (no pain no gain) to transform this wench into giving "physical theropy" to male hormonal requirements, no matter how slutty it makes her nor how public the men have the whim to make her perform. Maybe she can be compelled to use a tit-press on herself for a film, being sure (under compulsion) to smile for the camera?
"Roof" (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Pen_Telme
(Edit) (Nov 20, 2004)
- Thank you for your gracious review
This is an old, old story i located recently, I never finished the story, and was curious to see if anyone would want me to continue with it, please let me know if you would like to see it continued, or should I stop here
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| Reviewer:
Powerone
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Nov 20, 2004 |
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You need someone to go over your story before you post it. A mass of errors, grammar, spelling, sentences, etc. If doesn't have to be perfect, but should be readable. As far as the story, didn't really care for it. It was all a one sided conversation with your victim limited to about three lines. He instructs her to do things, she does them. Nothing special in the story that I would want to read another chapter. Don't want to discourage you from writing, but try again. (3/10)
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- Replied by:
Pen_Telme
(Edit) (Nov 20, 2004)
- Powerone,
Thank you for your comments, one item not listed in the story line was that this was a very old story i did years ago, i real never finished it beyond what i posted
My most recent one is "Workout Girls" which i am still working on part 2 & 3.
I want to go back to this one and clean it up, edit it and make it more enjoyable to read
Any suggestions you can offer are appriciated
I was not expecting high reviews on this. I still have not decided whatif anything i will do with this particular story
Thanks Again,
Pen
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