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Bethany's Sins
Author: Rebel Snowdrop
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(Added on Dec 3, 2004)
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Bethany steals millions from a business with connections to the torture trade. Their bounty hunter uses their products to lay a trap at a church, where she suffers for her sins. |
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Average (?):  (8/10) |
Average
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Highest
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Feb 2, 2006 |
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good story, sometimes a little heavy in wording, but overall good (8/10)
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Ruby
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Feb 12, 2005 |
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Yummy punishment for a naughty girl. Bethany certainly seems to be getting what she deserves and more. (9/10)
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longrover
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Jan 6, 2005 |
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Good story, well done, liked the organ, but too many words for the action, I'm afraid. I've read the rest and the balance is much better. I didn't take the contest constraint into consideration originally, since that's part of it. +2 points. (9/10)
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chksng19
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Dec 21, 2004 |
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The bare story for the contest was quite good, but as mentioned below (certainly due to the contest constraints of size) the story needed more. I am pleased to see you have added more, and hope you will choose to continue. Very well written, creative (especially the organ, and the poisoned soup) and fun. (8/10)
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mkemse
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Dec 4, 2004 |
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i am waiting to see where you go next with this (8/10)
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