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Girls Night In
Author: melody
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(Added on Dec 14, 2004)
(This month 22927 readers) (Total 64399 readers) |
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Melody is invited for an evening of entertainment - but she is the entertainment. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 31, 2006 |
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could have been should have been much better with the codes and theme used (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
longrover
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Jan 5, 2005 |
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I liked episode one better (prefer M/f to F/f), but very well done. I agree with the comments about "Fanny." (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Dec 23, 2004 |
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I'm still agreeing with everyone else on the misuse of 'fanny', but this story lacked the brevity problem of your bar story. Really quite well written and more imaginative than my own. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Shack
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Dec 20, 2004 |
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It's quite an entertaining read but is completely spoiled by the repetitive use of the ambiguous and childish word "fanny." (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
Ruby
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Dec 18, 2004 |
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Issue: A "fanny" in the US is the same thing
as the bottom.
In this story - "fanny" is used as an alternative
word to cunt, pussy or her sex and sometimes seems to be used to replace clit or mons.
Example line:
Leading her back into the main room Melody was laid on her back while the others applied lotion to her fanny and bottom before dusting her down with baby powder. "There we don't want nappy rash, do we"
* Substituting the word "fanny" for sex
would clear the confusion and remove the distraction from an otherwise good story.
* I'd be happy to read again and re-rate when this is refreshed. (6/10)
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- Replied by:
Shack
(Edit) (Dec 20, 2004)
- I have to agree with this review. Not only is the word "fanny" ambiguous but it sounds childish and is used so frequently that it becomes utterly dull. A variety of words would be better, personally, I don't think "cunt" and "sex" can be beaten, so long as they're not used in every sentence.
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| Reviewer:
vickytv
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Dec 14, 2004 |
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very nice! (8/10)
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