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East Coast Slavers Organization
Author: Desert Dog
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(Added on Feb 14, 2005)
(This month 229797 readers) (Total 364445 readers) |
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This tale chronicles the adventures of Aaron Clarke, a budding slaver setting up a franchise operation in Miami, Florida. Business and adventure literally fall his way as Aaron sets about creating identities, bases of operations, and a client base; all accomplished with the guidance of his partner Steve Austin. Aaron quickly discovers that various illegal enterprises present him an opportunity for acquiring stock (women), cash, and other enticements too good to pass up. The windfall of millions of dollars and the easy acquisition of slaves leads to a reanalysis of his business ethics and personal morals. Aaron Clarke determines that it is so easy to find prey worthy of punishment that he adjusts his business model accordingly, punishing the guilty and using his illicit gains to help others; all immensely sexy women that remain available for his enjoyment. |
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Average (?): (8.5/10) |
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Reviewer:
Jorgy444
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Sep 8, 2012 |
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After reading the first 21 chapters I can most definitely recommend the story to be read, I will enjoy finishing it! Although some of the early scenarios are outlandish at best, I simply can't believe our hero would hand over the reins of training slaves to Puppy in the first two weeks of such an elaborate system. Nor, can I swallow that Aaron could do all he did all by himself and keep himself and the corporation from trouble. That being said, great premise, with great promise. (7/10)
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Reviewer:
reader01
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Oct 27, 2005 |
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An epic in the intended sense. Grand in scope with a moral twist that enhances the readers interest in the fantasy. Lots of characters, but the continuity and the Character List add to the readers keeping everything in mind. I love the transition between background information and "getting on" with the tale. Superbly interesting concept and a great narrative equals a marvelous fantasy adventure, at least from my perspective. The only down-side is the prolonged/sparodic wait for the next installation to be posted. Now that the story is complete, let's give credit to the whole story as deserving the highest rating possible. Make mine a 10. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Desert Dog
(Edit) (Apr 11, 2005)
- Thanks for the kind words. This story will be winding down soon; not to worry though, at least three follow-on tales are nearly finished. They will be shorter and focus more on 'core' players in each story. I hope you will enjoy them.
Desert Dog
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Reviewer:
pejanon
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Jun 6, 2005 |
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great ideas and great promises not fullfied. Writing is a bit bland (it's all writen in same tempo) and I find RobinHoodesque parts quite boring, or at least too loooong. Too bad, a lot of homework and fieldwork went into this. It's still worth following and I will. (6/10)
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paulwswan
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May 1, 2005 |
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Once got overthe sequence of the story it was enjoyable and with the twist to make the organization do some good. (9/10)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Apr 24, 2005 |
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Some stories make you think, why did i start rading this, what does it offe,r but you also learn as you read on when you are reading it (10/10)
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Reviewer:
La Toya
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Apr 20, 2005 |
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While the start, had me wondering what I was reading. I now understand the set up of the story. You have done a great job with this story. I look forward to reading more. For those who fail to read this, well it is thier major lose! This just keeps geting better and better!!! 4/20/05 Dam I cant rate the story higher than 10, as this should be rated higher (10/10)
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castle2001
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Mar 14, 2005 |
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I'm surprised that there have not been more reviews posted. This is a well written organizational fantasy. I like the direction that it is going with the implant control. (10/10)
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Reviewer:
Engineer
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Mar 7, 2005 |
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A very nice idea, with much promise in the setup and many creative ideas. Unfortunately, IMHO the author tried to put too many eggs in one basket. As well as the slavery organization seems to have become too large for operating secretly, the story became too complex. Several scenes look overstuffed and exaggerated to really accept them. The technically good, but not very accentuated way of writing adds to the problems of catching excitement and keeping track of the plot. (6/10)
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