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Ashley And Her Rape Fantasy
Author: bitchboy
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(Added on Mar 19, 2005)
(This month 12432 readers) (Total 31706 readers) |
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Ashley has nice thighs and a rape fantasy. In an act of drunken desperation, I took advantage. More parts to be added later. |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Curtis
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Apr 25, 2006 |
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Really well done. You kept your tone consistent throughout. I find it hard to write about an asshole for more than a couple of paragraphs. Congratulations. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Mad Lews
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Mar 22, 2005 |
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This is a very raw, almost crude story. But that well reflects the attitude of the narrator.
As has been pointed out you have a fair number of grammatical errors, but then again this ain't no english class.
(8/10)
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| Reviewer:
bisarah
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Mar 21, 2005 |
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well ... you had some typos and grammar errors that were distracting from the story and i got confused a few times about who was doing the talking. a bit of clean-up and this story would be better. (7/10)
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gothgirlle
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Mar 21, 2005 |
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I enjoyed the story and thought that has definite potential. There are a few grammatical errors as you get to the good stuff that makes it a bit cloudy. Conversations were well constructed, but need a bit more of 'he/she said' kind of description to make it clear which character is speaking, specifically in the conversation about Ashley. Nice erotic details, well maintained movement throughout story. I thought it was enjoyable and just needed another edit or so. Thanks! (7/10)
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