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Night Prowler
Author: Paddymellon
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(Added on May 16, 2001)
(This month 72540 readers) (Total 215279 readers) |
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Having inherited money, he enjoyed his early retirement and planned and executed a perfect abduction. |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Jorgy444
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Aug 31, 2012 |
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I know in these fantasies that realism sometimes
goes out the window. But in this story you don't
just have a window of fantastic baloney here you
have an open wall of it. That being said it still
is highly erotic and well written even with all the mistakes.
(8/10)
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sandersangel
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Mar 26, 2012 |
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EXCELLENT writing. I agree with the others- Want more!! My opinion? I wouldn't change a thing-it had a very nice combination of everything I want to see or read. Great mind!! (10/10)
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starglitter
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Jun 22, 2011 |
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Came hard 3 times reading this.with help..excellent imagination..carriage got old...but all in all.absolutely incredible! Makes me want try to write. (10/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 18, 2009 |
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A tad scary, but excellently written. My only complaint is that the story is written from the first person perspective. But that's just me.
JJ (10/10)
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wabusheshe
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Jun 19, 2007 |
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Great story line and an enjoyable read. I was a bit disapointed with the ending of last chapter. Here is a guy that has his shit together, and everything is going according to plan. Then suddenly he throws all his hard work away by becoming too soft hearted. But as I mentioned above, it is an enjoyable read. I too would like to see another chapter or two, or three, or four.
Cheers,
Rob (9/10)
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25toLife
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Jan 10, 2007 |
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This story probably deserved a 10, but it need some SERIOUS editing. Try assigning ONE name to each girl and ONE hair color to each of them. Writing them down on a piece of paper should help. (8/10)
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dennisthmn
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Aug 18, 2006 |
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Very good story, But I put off when you included a man, also a bit more interest in the pony side would be o'k like piercings etc (7/10)
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Botie2
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May 20, 2006 |
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Very well written. Very erotic. You can keep going with this. I am sure more than I would appreciate another chapter. (10/10)
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egore
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Apr 10, 2006 |
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don't know how it could get better but i hope for more (10/10)
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FurryFury
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Feb 5, 2006 |
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I LOVE this story! I want more please, much more story that goes on from here. Please write more!
Your fan,
FurryFury (10/10)
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chooky_104
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Jan 27, 2006 |
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Loved the story. Want more... (10/10)
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BDSgirl
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Aug 9, 2005 |
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i first read this story about a year ago, and i really liked it. a lot. and then i read it again about 6 months ago. and i still really liked it. a lot. and you know what? i still really like it a lot. i like the way it is written, i like the way he does things, i like the way the plot has little kinks in it. ( and the big kinks too) and it is just good reading. i hope you have found yourself another jewel by now. (10/10)
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Wyn
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Feb 6, 2004 |
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Excellent writing, good plot & character developement. (10/10)
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mkemse
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Sep 26, 2003 |
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Outstanding, hope to see more of the same soon (10/10)
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Nitrofox
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Dec 11, 2002 |
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This is a really great story. What really really really helps it out is the writing. The writing is really good, and the plot is well defined. Though I won't write as much as e_fr did, I will say that this is a really good story, and I would reccomend it highly. (10/10)
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e_fr
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Sep 19, 2001 |
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This story is for people not fearing to loose their trail. Although at the beginning it seems so simple, our hero having a good eye to three babes. Bur then the author begins to lavishly distribute amomgst the chicks a lot of virginhood and bodies in beautyful shape, four names as well as four hair colours, three nick names,two ages and it turns out to be, well, not simple at all.
"Unknown" is the name of a girl, who for a whole year sat right in front of our hero in a class at the local Jr. college, but his memory is as bad as an average teacher's so he intend just to call her Christy, because she reminds him of a foxy chick. For the time being, though, he settles for Slut, but happily he forgets that as easy as he forgot her real name and in time of need, when he forgets Chisty, he calls her simply Christina.
Blondie and brownie are virgins, but Red is not, and all are 18. Vicky is redhaired as is Cindy, but Cindy is also blonde and extremely beautiful as redhead, while Vicky, although redhaired, is a also a virgin, and all are 18. Pat, though much older, has remained a virgin too, but as a police officer she somehow did not qualify for the vice squad. Christy at 18 is a goddess of beauty with her long golden hair and perfect face, but as brunette she is is 5'5" or so short and stocky to a degree and, so it seems, older, although our hero enjoys her perfect body.
At only 18 the brunette, whose hair is foxy red and whose name is so hard to remember is a also a virgin. As she gets her ersatzname she grows 6" taller than Pat, who is blonde, so that Pat, the 23 year old virgin officer, can make no way with all her training in close combat and despictably looses to the 18 year old coed in a catfight. But Christy was tired of running before the carriage and Pat, as she sat right in front of her raper to be in accounting class, accustomed to her role as an 18 year old shy submissive brunette.
But Vicky is quickly conquered and Christy a gorgeous babe! She've adjusted more quickly and is top dog also as is Pat as is Christy again and the strange upperdogs, who like Red and all the rest by now is no longer burdened by virginhood, like to beat the underdogs more than to be beaten themselves.
But nevertheless, however their doggie style, all the girls seem contend to have left their wild life behind them with its spiked techila and puerile guessing about virginhood. They love to be likewise orderly fucked by dog and man and well disciplined they cherish the close feeling they'd developed, being branded together.
So they often gather:
Christy with Cindy and Pat.
Christy with Vicky and Pat.
Unknown with Vicky and Cindy.
And the blondes with the reds and brunettes and the goldenhaired.
And although the poor guy whips the whole bunch in angry confusion and tells it that questions are not an option, the former virgins and Red, when gags are not in place, remain chatty, getting a real kick out of it all and Denise.
(10/10)
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