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Author: slave ruthie
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(Added on Jun 3, 2005)
(This month 15675 readers) (Total 35650 readers) |
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A Romanian orphan girl makes the biggest mistake of her life... |
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Weighed
Average (?): (7/10) |
Average
Rating: (7.5/10) |
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Reviewer:
Rocky
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Jun 6, 2005 |
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A bit awkward at parts, but an excellent job of revealing the main character's very powerful emotions. I do look forward to future installments of this potentially fine story. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
slave ruthie
(Edit) (Jun 11, 2005)
- i'd really appreciate it if You might guide me by pointing out the awkward parts, Rocky Sir - i re-read it online and thought "hmm, i would change one or two things if i was writing it now in 2005 - 2 years later than this version"
thank You very much for feedback - it really, really helps writers on this site to know their efforts are being read and thought about :)
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Jun 6, 2005 |
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i enjoyed reading it and look forward to more chapters (7/10)
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- Replied by:
slave ruthie
(Edit) (Jun 11, 2005)
- thank You for reviewing! i know it needs revisions and at the moment i have no clear plan for the next chapter (any suggestions gratefully received!)
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Reviewer:
spitfrye
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Jun 5, 2005 |
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Good opening for more chapters to come. Good attention to detail and the orphan's girl point of view was very believable. Good job. Looking forward to reading more. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
slave ruthie
(Edit) (Jun 6, 2005)
- thank you! i'm not sure where this story is going - it sort of connects with the Organization Series but i wanted to try soemthing much darker lol - not much chance of a happy ending i'm afraid! if any readers have suggestions please please tell me - i won't necessarily be able to use them but it does help to hear how people view a storyline evolving :)
love & respect ruthie XXXXXX
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