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Acquisition
Author: Headhunter
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(Added on Jun 4, 2001)
(This month 393412 readers) (Total 544241 readers) |
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She took advantage of her timid neighbor Pam and took the control over Pam, the body and the spirit. They became more and more dependent to each other. |
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Average (?):  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
happyoutcome
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Jun 13, 2016 |
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<br /><b>Warning</b>: Function eregi_replace() is deprecated in <b>/home/bdsmlibr/public_html/stories/review_edit.php</b> on line <b>43</b><br /><br /><b>Warning</b>: Function eregi_replace() is deprecated in <b>/home/bdsmlibr/public_html/stories/review_edit.php</b> on line <b>43</b><br />An almost excellent story. Almost a masterpiece. The introduction of the Jake and Scotty characters makes the story drag whenever using those two. Also Bess suddenly turns naive about Jake.
Also Bess is too eager to share Pam with males that potentially might just take her away from hubby and her? If Bess had already realized she was attracted to Pam and could become bisexual with her, she waited too long to have her service her. Also in the aftermath, neither Bess nor Pam are actually shown to rationalize their actions at least to the conclusion chosen. However, kudos for actually almost showing a philosophy for the two main characters. Kudos for actually not quitting and actually resolving most issues to the story. Please skip the weak Miss and first name use for domination. Miss and the last name is actually more effective. Some people get called Miss and their first name everyday and it is no big deal. The proper progression was from Miss and last name to Mistress.
Did Bess not deep kiss Pam ever? Strange. Great effort. Keep writing and please continue this one with Pam now rebelling due to her conscience and resolve it again. You have shown the creativity. (9/10)
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jls152
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Mar 30, 2012 |
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I appreciate your gradual build up and laying your story's foundation. I loved your ending. Thanks for all the fun reading. How long did you keep tweaking your story? And finally say, "That's it; the story is done I am not tweaking it anymore".? (9/10)
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- Replied by:
jls152
(Edit) (Mar 26, 2012)
- I wrote the review after reading the first chapter. Now for chapter two tomorrow.
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JimmyJump
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Jan 3, 2009 |
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In most stories where a dominant person takes control over an, at the beginning, naïve and unsuspecting submissive, it takes about two paragraphs before the latent sub has surrendered, has gotten tattoos and piercings and is basically just a fucktoy for the rest of the shenanigans. Nice, but totally unbelievable.
Here, we have what might be the ultimate telling of a complete turnaround of a shy miss-everyday into a raving masochist.
The pace is excellent, the storyline is delicious, the surroundings in which the antagonists move about are painted with detail and care, the mindgames are realistic with to the point and accurate dialogues, the characters are three-dimensional with the right amount of aprehention, reluctance and surrender and the plot is well woven and absolutely believable.
Stunner of a story and best 'taking-control' tale I've read so far.
JJ (10/10)
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nakdsub
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Jan 29, 2008 |
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Wow!!! It took me a long time to read the entire story but it was well worth it. Great, great story. (10/10)
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Voracious Reader
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Dec 15, 2007 |
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Like everyone else, if I could rate this an 11 or a 12, I'd have done it. This is BY FAR the best story of the genre that I have read. Way too often, the sub gets blackmailed and just caves in to the demands. This slow, deliberate "acquisition" of Pam to Pet is much more believable, and consequently much more enjoyable. On top of being excellent erotica, this story is just a good story. It has a good beginning allowing great character development; it has the build up to the characters' lives; it has the critical transition when it looks like everything is going to come falling down around our duo's ears; and it has a well thought out and satisfying ending. If you haven't read this novella yet, you're missing a true masterpiece. (10/10)
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toronto40gal
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Aug 19, 2006 |
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As a sub, I found this story outstanding and extremely erotic. (10/10)
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tomupstateny
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May 5, 2005 |
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the best story I ever read great job!! I give it a 12!!!! It was like a great book I could not put it down till I read the hole thing. (10/10)
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sunburststrat
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Mar 15, 2005 |
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What a hedonistic joy ride! I loved the pace of this with Pam being taken step by little baby step into submission. And what a sexy creature she turned into. It was such pure pleasure to read this, that I did not want it to end. I just about had a heart attack when I thought Jake would successfully steal her for his own sick abuse, but the author pulled together a very unexpected and creative twist comparable to the best suspense novels. I will now be able to sleep nights, knowing Pam is OK. The summary detailing how it all worked out in the end for each of the main characters was such a relief and very welcome. I had really come to like Bess also, so her change of attitude and new appreciation and acknowledged love for Pam was just heartwarming. If only I could rate it higher that a 10. The only thing I don't understand is how 47967 readers, to date, could have read this and only 8 people have reviewed it. The effort that went into this story, and the corresponding results, deserve so much more. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
kwankawing
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Jul 3, 2004 |
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this story is attractive and sex (10/10)
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Wyn
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Feb 13, 2004 |
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Excellent story. It started off a bit slow for me, but laid a good foundation for the progress of the story. Good plot, good characters. (10/10)
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jbowler65
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Dec 14, 2003 |
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Great story. Perfect pace and build-up. Outstanding effort. (10/10)
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mkemse
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Sep 26, 2003 |
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To bad i could not rate it higher,
love the way the story progresses, it's long but it keeps your attention a 10plus!!!!! (10/10)
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dchame
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Feb 8, 2002 |
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Very good story. Kind of Housewife At Play from Rebecca for who know. (10/10)
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bob
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Jun 6, 2001 |
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An exotic and believable tale about a dominant woman who transforms her boring but beautiful neighbor into an adoring and obedient slave. Not a quick fuck story - but rather a graphic realistic journey into the world of slavery and sexual relese. The story is so well told, the reader must wonder if the events are more fact than fiction. (10/10)
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