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A Lesson in Proper Behavior
Author: Coyote
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(Added on Aug 20, 2005)
(This month 26892 readers) (Total 53355 readers) |
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Young girl is sent to a neighbors house for punishment and other fun when she refuses to have sex with her step-mom. She learns her lesson. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6.5/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (9/10) |
Lowest
Rating:  (1/10) |
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| Reviewer:
neededcritic
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Jul 26, 2016 |
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The story has been removed leaving only the title. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
Josephl
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Aug 9, 2011 |
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Playtime with norreen is excellent imaginative stoy (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
newguru
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Aug 23, 2005 |
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While the writing was decent, I felt the story was unbelievable. (4/10)
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| Reviewer:
C_Lakewood
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Aug 21, 2005 |
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It's rather well-written, but quite distasteful.
Doreen is just too young and defenseless. The
expected continuation, with an older woman,
shows promise, however.
(5/10)
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- Replied by:
coyote
(Edit) (Aug 21, 2005)
- So what you're saying is that if the victim was 23 years old the story would have been better reviewed. I find it quite unfair to give a low rating to a story because one doesn't care for a particular character represented in it. Stories are for ALL tastes. I, for one, do not care for stories involving scatology, snuff or real torture but would never put the death blow to any authors overall rating because of my own individual distaste for what may be enjoyed by many.
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C_Lakewood
(Edit) (Aug 22, 2005)
- This is a reply to Coyote's reply.
I'm sorry. If Doreen had been even a few years
older than 12, if she'd been mentally sharper,
(or at least had been guilty of something),
if the stepmother had subsequently had a fatal
fall down the cellar stairs or the sadistic
neighbor had perished when his house burned
down -- if, in short, it had been a different
story...it would have been a different story.
Ironically, the actual story was so well-written
the problem was exacerbated for me: she was so
clearly and pathetically drawn that it was clear
that tormenting Doreen was akin to drowning
puppies. I did enjoy your story "The Little
Housewife Gets Hers." The title character in
that one might not have stood much of a chance,
either, but at least she did have an adult's
mental and physical resources.
I hope this clarifies my position for you.
Finally, I do not consider a 5 to be quite the
"death blow" that you do.
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| Reviewer:
mike uk reader
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Aug 21, 2005 |
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Another excellient hot spicy written story from Coyote. Plenty of long drawn out humiliation for young Doreen,I would have liked John the abuser to have been invited over to Muriels house for dinner and for desserts a nice little threesome with miss piggy.HOPE THERE IS MORE TO CUM... (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
rolf palsy
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Aug 21, 2005 |
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Good stuff! It's refreshing to read something oriented to the strokers on the site, and we are legion. Looking forward to more of the same, and less of the standard weak, weepy, wussy garbage that clutters up this place. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Aug 20, 2005 |
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ler's see where you go from here (7/10)
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