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Lynsey's Game
Author: Danielle
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(Added on Aug 24, 2005)
(This month 48450 readers) (Total 92748 readers) |
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Lynsey is a sweet girl who has always had things her own way. So the thought of a little danger excites her. On the internet, she begins to play an exciting little game, thinking that she's safe. But she's not... |
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JimmyJump
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Jun 1, 2008 |
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Superior writing and drawing of the main characters. Excellent storyline. What more can a reader ask for?
JJ (9/10)
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Cutemary1978
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May 22, 2008 |
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Terrific story, extremely well written. This story has great plot and character development and is one of the best I have read!!! (9/10)
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mcwonka
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May 16, 2008 |
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This is by far one of my favorite stories. The character development is superb. I'm a big fan of humiliation stories and this does it better than almost any other story. Mostly because you spend so much time developing the main character before her downfall--and even that is drawn out in exquisite fashion. Thank you. (10/10)
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master2slavesny
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Nov 29, 2005 |
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very well written, it would have been more enjoyable if drugs were not involved (10/10)
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Dee Driscoll
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Sep 15, 2005 |
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As previous reviewers have stated, a very impressive story. I have a soft spot for stories that are carefully built with attention to detail and are unafraid to take their time. Yes, the story is long but I thought justifyably so. There are no subplots or set pieces that would feel slapped on, instead it all has a reason to be there and leads to a conclusion.
A couple of things that really impressed me:
- Attention to characters. Not only the lead character, but all of the 'supporting cast' is painted with satisfying depth. We don't get to extensively learn about their everyday lives and philosophies but we do get appropriate in-sight. They are living, breathing people and even though we only learn about one interest they have in life, we do get a glimpse of their 'other' lives, plus it is easy to tell them apart. Some great dialogue there, especially the back alley double rape scene.
- The consistency of plans, actions and events. At first I thought all the hard work that 'the club' does with Lynsey prior to moving on to rapes was redundant in plot terms but it all served a purpose in the end.
- The structure. I expected slow buildup and then one cathartic sex scene. What I got was actually a buildup and then a series of cathartic sex scenes connected through a very satisfying series of scenes of reflection and analysis. It is not easy going back to square one once the first rape is done and the symbolical balance is tipped, but here it's done majestically. That way, the story manages to extend its life in the suspense zone, making the series of cathartic events that more effective.
- Believability. Sure, there's still some suspension of disbelief you have to employ here (but isn't it true for any porn?), but Lynsey's mental/ physical/ spiritual (d)evolution is portrayed convincingly and the meticulous planning/ activities undertaken by 'the club' are believable on the account of a well described lust they all share. Even the dreaded 'chemical crutch' that the author used (the drugs) managed to work fine in this context despite the fact that I usually find this tool an easy way out in stories of this type.
I do have a small criticism or two but these are purely down to individual tastes I believe - for me, the epilogue was logical and believable, but almost unnecessarry since the symbolical goal has already been reached - the long description of the events 'after' felt more like a personal fetish of the author than a necessarry conclusion. I would have made it shorter, but then again, as I said, this is most likely just a matter of personal tastes.
In conclusion: a powerful, scary but erotic story. Hopefully the author gives us the opportunity to read more of her works sooner rather than later. (9/10)
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H Dean
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Sep 13, 2005 |
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Quite enjoyable and well written, over all. An aggressive tale that barely misses being perfect in the downfall of its main character. Unfortunately, it is mising that one intangible that would have put it out of reach. (9/10)
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bracemaiden
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Sep 7, 2005 |
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It's a. . .a. . . to watch the degredation, not just in a scene, but the elimination of a life is. . . so right, but so wrong!
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Privately Playful
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Sep 2, 2005 |
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This story is how I found this site. What a fantastic job you have done. I loved it, I appreciate all the time and effort you put into this work. Very well done.
While it was long, the pace, the set-up and excitement were all there. Like others mentioned, the ending was interesting. I haven't a clear opinion on it as yet. I found their use of Lynsey to be odd, based on the original reason for their club. However, I did enjoy the slow down. Almost as if coming off a roller coaster, the cars move slowly to a stop to allow for a steady dismount as it were. It was so exciting.
I will now go looking for more of your stories. (10/10)
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msil
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Aug 30, 2005 |
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really hot, well-written, kinky. (9/10)
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Jaytee
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Aug 26, 2005 |
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There is a brilliantly thought out and written story. (10/10)
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brnnips
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Aug 26, 2005 |
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I was really enjoying the story until I got to the bestiality part. If that had of been put in the story codes I would not have read it. As it was I had to stop reading the minute the mention of a dog came up. So it was a big disappointment to me not to be able to finish the story. But as the other reviewers have mention your writing was great and look forward to reading more of your stories, but pretty please in the future, if possible list out possible objectional material in the story codes. Thanks! (6/10)
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"Roof"
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Aug 25, 2005 |
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The story "Lynsey's Game" is great! Pleasure to read of supercillious snob-bitches being "re-educated" getting into touch with their neglected inner slut. Hope there are further episodes to appear and that they are swiftly posted. Looking forward to fucktoy Lynsey subjected to more public and private degradation---and more painful "attitude adjustment" at the hands of the men controlling her. (9/10)
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chooky_104
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Aug 25, 2005 |
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Great stroy. Only negative is that it is sooooo long, perhaps could have been divided into chapters. I like the domination of her, the ending was a little 'flowery', I would have preferred her to be dominated by one man, but still enjoyed the story. (7/10)
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Engineer
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Aug 24, 2005 |
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One of the best stories I ever read. The author combines great inspiration with psychological understanding and proficient writing skills. Just some swearwords are used a bit too often, for my taste, so they became a stereotype. (10/10)
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Lindalooking
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Aug 24, 2005 |
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Can I give it 20 stars! Excellent work! This is a well thought out story that is meticulous in its detail. The build up is intense, the plot line well thought out, and the ending, oh boy (or should I say oh girl!), the ending is perfect. I realize some other reviewers don’t like the ending, but I respectfully disagree. The ending brings the reader back down to the ground, allowing you to finally take a breath! It’s what makes the difference between your run of the mill “net” story, and an excellent story.
An instant classic, you don’t have to read this one twice before you realize a tremendous story is being developed. You will read it twice because you can not believe that each detail is well thought out (example, it was a red dress on page on page 8 and it was a red dress on page 54). My hats off to the proofreader!
Finally, to take a character and allow the reader to see the character (in this case Lynsey) reduced to “nothing” in tiny little steps is tough work, but Danielle does it effortlessly.
(10/10)
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mkemse
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Aug 24, 2005 |
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outstanding, that simple (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Danielle
(Edit) (Aug 24, 2005)
- Thank you very much. I'm very, very flattered.
Danielle
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Roadrunner2
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Aug 24, 2005 |
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Very glad to see the return of this author. Personally I like writers who take their time building up their stories, and this is a cruel story excuted with patiencewith care. Like the previous reviwer, my only complaint is about the ending. (9/10)
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Mr. Pete
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Aug 24, 2005 |
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Simply great!!! (Don't read on if you don't want to read about the plot.) The slow path to Lynsey's destruction was so well-executed... wow! A few very minor points. In the end, I found L's complete transformation into a full-time whore a bit unbelievable. Why would these guys need her for the money and why would they want to bother to micro-manage her life after they already broke her so completely? I think a better ending might have had her at their beck and call, but not so utterly ruined. And I liked the touch of her believing that the rapes were not really rapes, but that was also a bit of a stretch for what Jack had done to her. Aside from that... excellent story! (10/10)
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