|
| Ratings and Reviews: |
| Number
of Ratings: 18 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| 1 |
2 |
3 |
4 |
5 |
6 |
7 |
8 |
9 |
10 |
| 0% |
6% |
0% |
22% |
0% |
6% |
6% |
22% |
0% |
39% |
|
Weighed
Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
| Average
Rating: (7.5/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (10/10) |
Lowest
Rating:  (2/10) |
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
seeder21
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jun 24, 2016 |
| |
I would have liked to seen more. This story could continue for a few more chapters. Thank you for your story. Interesting. (8/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
LORD-MASTERSHAVE
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 30, 2012 |
| |
JUST FINISH READING THIS STORY TO BAD THAT YOU DID NOT CONTINUED THE STORY THIS ONE IS SO AWESOME LOVE EVERY MIN. OF THE STORY AND HOPE TO FIND OUT WHAT WILL HAPPEN TO THE COUPLE AND IF THEY WILL GET OUT IF IT. AND WHAT WILL HAPPEN TO THE MALE AND FEMALE IN THIS STORY please please please CONTINUED THIS STORY SOON THANK YOU (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Alix
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 3, 2011 |
| |
As already noted there were a few problems, but I got by and am stopping at part one so as to not rush a good thing; thanks for the story. (8/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
mark20
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Mar 24, 2009 |
| |
too long.... interestin idea but fot a short story it goes no where (4/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
donkotts
(Edit) |
Rating: |
May 17, 2006 |
| |
Wow! Ehat's going to happen next. A little slow and a couple mistakes but I like this story (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
markfisher
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Apr 4, 2006 |
| |
A little long but I enjoyed the build-up. Please finish (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
DungeonMaster6
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Mar 4, 2006 |
| |
The poor grammar and spelling kept me from rating this a ten. However, the idea of these white people being enslaved by a group of blacks is intriguing indeed. I'm looking forward to more chapters. (8/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 14, 2006 |
| |
i am rating it low not because it is a bad story but there is no synopsis to draw a reader into readingit, i do not wantto guesswhat a story is abouti wantto reada general overview of it first (4/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
jack6199
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jan 8, 2006 |
| |
i check every day for an additional chapter. does not concern me if errors are made by the author. it is the style that matters.karen kay writes stories of racial harmony whereas the wife is white,sexy,teats limited to a "b or c" cup,and she tries to reach out to the black man with a lot of sensitivity. the white husband loves his wife and puts his faith in her, that she will be able to return that love to him, yet at the same time loves her black brothers, as she knows that they will fill her up. gradually the husband starts to bond with the black brothers. sure hope that karen kay will always arrange her stories so as the husband has to wear a cock cage, with a lock and key, and the key has to remain in a safety deposit box at a local bank. of course the husband can not get access to the key (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
billemmons
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jan 5, 2006 |
| |
I have been reading this story since it was first posted and I think the gramer has been getting better with each chapter and I like the style of the story. Keep writing. (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
H Dean
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jan 5, 2006 |
| |
I was stunned by the nearly complete lack of punctuation and run on sentences. One does not expect perfect grammar. Strangely enough, I didn't mind the spelling gaffs so much as I was irritated at the complete lack of commas where they were needed.
The story content was less than special, as well. I see little to recomend except as an example of what not to do. (2/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
chksng19
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 25, 2005 |
| |
"because of the instant shun light and tried to see the figures standing outside the truck. Two men hooped into the truck"
Karen, way, way, way too many errors. The plural of handcuff is handcuffs, not handcuff's. There is no "Jamaican" language. There are literally dozens of simple errors in spelling, grammar, punctuation, and what are called "spell-check errors" like those above. You need an editor, or several, and badly.
The story has a lot of promise, and I hope you gift us with more chapters. It is indeed a fine beginning. But get those errors repaired before you post the next chapter. Your scores will improve, and your readers will thank you.
The second chapter still has too many spell-check errors; many many incorrect words. The story line is improving a little, but you need to get yourself an editor. PLEASE. A few small fixes will equal a vast increase in your score. (4/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 24, 2005 |
| |
The story could have used a better proof reading. The premise of the story is great though.
The second chapter was a vast improvement to the beginnning (7/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Rabbit1
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 16, 2005 |
| |
Very well written --I would recommend it (8/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
donfisher
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 13, 2005 |
| |
I see we had a KKK member reading this story, I think it was a wonderful start and only saw one mis-spelled word. What do the rest of you think? (10/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
SubMissive
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 13, 2005 |
| |
No imagination, classic white/black scenario that reflects the writer's ignorance of other races. Plot almost shows promise, keep working on it. Editing and checking your spelling would be a huge benefit to your writing. (4/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
La Toya
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 11, 2005 |
| |
lets see were you take it from here (6/10)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
markjenny
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 9, 2005 |
| |
Can't wait for the remaining chapters to be posted (10/10)
|
|
|
About 