|
|
|
|
|
Market Forces
Author: Freddie Clegg
|
| |
(Added on Feb 1, 2006)
(This month 328227 readers) (Total 513347 readers) |
| |
An international organisation specialising in slavery recruits a marketing manager to help them with their business. |
| Ratings and Reviews: |
| Number
of Ratings: 21 |
 |
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
|
| 1 |
2 |
3 |
4 |
5 |
6 |
7 |
8 |
9 |
10 |
| 0% |
0% |
0% |
0% |
10% |
5% |
0% |
10% |
52% |
24% |
|
Weighed
Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (9/10) |
Highest
Rating:  (10/10) |
Lowest
Rating:  (5/10) |
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
JimmyJump
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jun 19, 2010 |
| |
This is the kind of story which I usually start out of curiosity, but most of the time disregard after a couple of paragraphs, once I see where the author is leading me. Which a lot of the time is to a place I've been so many times before: the district of déjà-vu in Beenthereville.
Funny enough, Freddie does the same thing. Taking me to Beenthereville. But, Freddie is smarter than the average writer. So, he bulldozed the wider area and put in place a completely new urbanisation, with new malls and offices on newly implanted alleys and avenues and a lot of exotics populating those freshly asphalted streets, changing Beenthereville in Neverseen City.
Worst case scenario, it could have turned into Bummertown, but the Cleggster has more aces up his sleeve than there are cards in a deck, thus he comes up with another magnifico tale.
Am far from finished with the story, in fact I just started it. But knowing Freddie Clegg, at least the writer part, I'm confident I won't have to come back with a bucket and soap to publicly clean my mouth and apologise for misleading folk into reading "Market Forces". That is, should anybody care for what I write here.
Regards, Freddie.
JJ (10/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jun 21, 2010)
- Thanks for the review and the score, Jimmy. I hope you don't have to come back to clean your mouth. It's a long story, I know, but there should be plenty in it to keep you entertained as you go.
Cheers.
Freddie
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
johnlw77
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Oct 11, 2008 |
| |
I really enjoyed reading this. It's so good to have a story that develops and where the erotic stimulus of following a descent into helpless slavery can be experienced from so many angles - even the voluntary slave makes an appearance and we are on tenterhooks to discover where she will be taken and then regret her decision when it has become irreversible.
That said, for me the high point of such narratives is the story of the process of capture and subjugation – some girls forced to abject servitude in an instant, others not realising what is happening to them till it is too late - and then they go through all the stages of 'grief' (anger, resignation, attempt at bargaining sexual services and finally realisation that the helplessness and servitude is to be so total that they have no control at all over what is to be done to them and that that is what she must accept. I'd like Freddie to dwell on those moments in greater detail in a future story and try to trace the captive's inner journey and delicious anguish as much as her outer pain.
Thanks though, a great read and I’m now going to try some more!
(9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Oct 12, 2008)
- Hi & many thanks for your review.
You make some interesting points about subjugation - I'd be the first to admit that the "capture" part probably has the most interest for me but, yes, the other side deserves attention too. I'll see if I can play that in to future tales.
Glad you enjoyed it, though!
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
psychopixi
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 31, 2006 |
| |
I've really enjoyed reading this story. I'm thrilled to find something that's written so well, and in such a readable style. It's great that you've taken the time to develop the characters and situations, as well as making the actions and reactions seem plausible. Fantastic! (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jan 2, 2007)
- Many thanks, psychopixi, its always good to get a review, especially one as complimentary as this.
I hope to get around to writing one or more sequels at some point.
Thanks again.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
yosaure
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Dec 22, 2006 |
| |
Thanks again for your last deliveries.
Always a pleasure to meet again Lady M or Cora Argyll. (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jan 2, 2007)
- Thanks, yosaure, I'm almost sorry to have finished it. I do have some sequels planned which involve some of the characters from Market Forces. Not sure when they will get written though!
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
yosaure
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Oct 11, 2006 |
| |
So marvelous story...
I've the feeling that the posting of new chapters wil restart... (10/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Oct 12, 2006)
- Yosaure, don't worry there's plenty to come. Thanks for the review.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
cala
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 29, 2006 |
| |
Marvellously absorbing story! (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Aug 29, 2006)
- Thanks for your review and the score :-)
Regards
Freddie
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Backstabber
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 22, 2006 |
| |
Just letting you know how much I enjoyed this story. I have got to be honest I basically come to this site to read this story since I started reading it.
Although I do have a question, whatever happened to Cora? I was kind of wanted to go back to that cause I like where the story was going with her.
I got to see what happened to everyone else who screwed with them. Also I liked the Kushtia part of this story. It was very original and cool.
I also wanted to compliment you on your writing skill. You are very readable because your story has excellent flow. It makes you want to know what happens next. I know this is off the subject but I was also checking out another of your stories Golden Age and it was awesome. I know you have probably moved on from that but that story could be continued. I can dream can't I? Anyway good work and keep it coming. (10/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Aug 26, 2006)
- Thanks, Backstabber. Glad you're enjoying it. You will get to find out more about Cora and the Kushtians, there's still more to come.
No plans for a sequel to Golden Age but who knows? I'm always open to suggestions.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
willowblonde
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 11, 2006 |
| |
I've loved this story from the beginning but have been getting confused of late to open chapters such as 26 to find Chapter 40 or whatever there instead so have to keep opening the whole story to continue where I left off! But the story is excellent and feels as if I am reading a book rather than just porn. I note that some others find the non sex/domination bit boring, but to me it fleshes out the story and makes it more realistic. Please keep writing! (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Aug 11, 2006)
- Thanks for your review & I'm glad you enjoy the balance between the sex/domination and the other bits. Sorry about the confuision over part numbering, it's to do with the way that the publishing system here works - I publish chapter by chapter on another board but group some together for the library because there's a lag between sending of the story and it appearing.
Anyway, there's plenty more to come. The next part (28 : Chapters 46 & 47) should be up at the week-end.
Hope you enjoy it as much as the rest. :-)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
wayne1709
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Aug 7, 2006 |
| |
Good development a fair story arch that has possibilities. A move towards training willingly racruited submissives for the doms is a rich vein of character reactions. Ease out the boss, put his wife in charge. A great story is more then sex or submission sences. All sex just sex is just poor quality porno,a well done story is nearer a quality french movie sex is a part of the whole not the be all and end all. (10/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Aug 7, 2006)
- Well, thanks for a top score. I'm glad you're enjoying it. I try to mix up the sex with the other scene setting stuff in the right proportions to make a story where folk are interested in what might happen as well as enjoy what is happening. Thanks again for the review.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Disturbing Universe
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jul 29, 2006 |
| |
You know, I am permanently torn on this thing.
On the one hand, there's incredibly hot scenes where the slaves are being trained, or where they're being evaluated for sale. That's good stuff.
However, there's parts that just don't seem to go anywhere, like much of the middle-management cruft that builds up around the story. The meetings between the central character and his various clients are just kinda dull - yeah, this is going to happen in a scenario like this, but is it erotic? I don't think so; other people may.
There's also parts where it just feels...frankly horrific. I'm thinking specifically of Rachel's fate; as opposed to the usual sub mentality that most victims get in stories like this, we watch a fairly intelligent woman be turned into a drooling zombie. It's effectively creepy, but is effectively creepy what's being aimed at? Are you making a statement on how things are in porn versus how they'd be in real life, a la Joel Rosenberg's Guardians of the Flame series?
It's very good stuff. (I'd like to see more slave evalution, auctions, training - more interracial stuff, like Asians and Indians.)I'm hoping that Rachel finds a way out of her current predicament, 'cause seeing her beaten down just feels wrong - but I'll keep reading the story anyhow.
-Disturbing Universe (8/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jul 30, 2006)
- Well, thanks for the Review - its hard to respond to this but let me make a couple of points..
(1) The hardest thing I find in writing in the way I do for the boards (bit by bit, posted as we go) is getting the balance right between the bits that set the scene, the bits that build characters, the bits that move the plot forward and the bits that provide and erotic charge. (Of course some do all of those things at the same time) It would be better if I wrote things and then editted and posted, I guess but that wasn't how this story started out.
(2) I like to combine the mundane, the humorous, the erotic and the horrific. I think quite a lot of life is a combination of different situations. Maybe it doesn't work here.
(3) The "middle management cruft" is, for me central to the story. If this is about anything it's about how busineses can be engaged in almost anything but still be subject to the same petty problems.
(4) Am I "making a statement about the relation between porn and life"? I'm not sure. I think I'm more interested in the closeness between the two - the intrusion of real life into porn and vice versa.
(5) There's more about Rachel later, whether her situation improves or not, I guess depends on your point of view.
Thanks again for the review and the score.
Freddie
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Katerr
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jul 18, 2006 |
| |
The first chapters were very good - now it is getting more and more boring... (5/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jul 19, 2006)
- Well,I'm sorry that you feel this. Obviously I aim to keep it interesting and entertaining. I hope that you'll feel there's more entertainment in future episodes. The next update has Freddie exacting revenge for Tricia's abduction and Rachel's account of her treatment in the Centre which should lower the boredom factor. :-)
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
dncarac
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jul 10, 2006 |
| |
I am very pleased with this story. It has a unique point of view - that of a marketing manager for a white slavery business. While I like the acquisition/training/use scenes, it is because these are interspersed with realistic interplay between employees of the business: some protecting their turf, some being confidently competent, and so forth. The contrast between characters which could be in any company and the white slavery scenes enhances both. Long may this story run! (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jul 11, 2006)
- I'm glad you're enjoying the tale. Certainly it was part of the original idea to put some of the real-world problems of running a business into the white slavery world.
You'll be glad to know that there's plenty more to come of both sides of the story.
Thanks again for your review.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Satan_Klaus
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Jul 2, 2006 |
| |
This story definitely sets a new standard for the "white slavery ring" theme. The main characters have real, unique personalities and are not just stereotypes. The plot is consistent and from acquisition(abduction) down to sales everything is described with a lot of thought. (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Jul 3, 2006)
- Thanks for your review. I try to keep it real - that's a lot of the fun of it for me.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Rabbit1
(Edit) |
Rating: |
May 28, 2006 |
| |
I am a big fan of this series --I do not get much time to review stories but this one deserves it ---please keep them coming (10/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (May 29, 2006)
- Wow, Rabbit! A compliment indeed. Don't worry there's plenty more to come. I'm glad you're a fan.
- Replied by:
Rabbit1
(Edit) (Sep 3, 2006)
- Keeps getting better an better ---thanks and keep it coming
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
bondage_man69
(Edit) |
Rating: |
May 20, 2006 |
| |
a couple widely spaced punctuation errors, but a good story none the less. could use more rape/sodomy. (6/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (May 20, 2006)
- Sorry if the punctuation errors spoiled your enjoyment - I do try to get that right.
There's definitely more rape coming up in future chapters.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Engineer
(Edit) |
Rating: |
May 19, 2006 |
| |
A very well-thought, imaginative and carefully written story. With its more epic style, it may not be suitable when dense eroticism is wanted. But as a reading entertainment, it has very high qualities. (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (May 20, 2006)
- Thanks for your positive review, I'm glad you are enjoying it. I guess this story focuses on the fetish aspects of BDSM rather than on other forms of eroticism and there's plenty more to come.... :-)
- Replied by:
Engineer
(Edit) (Jun 4, 2006)
- Oh, I am very sorry! I did not mean to say your story would be un-erotic. Not in any way - it's just a bit calmer, more relaxed. I liked the new parts, too. :-)
- Replied by:
Engineer
(Edit) (Aug 12, 2006)
- I'm impressed by the professional methods of research and marketing applied in the story, as well as the psychological insight. But it's unlikely that a marketing guy is sent to snatching missions on his own. The burglar stunt in chapter 39 was absolutely amateurish and could have endangered the whole organization. From the point of business, the organization uses too large resources - time for a cost controller to step in. ;-) And I would appreciate a bit more and extensified action with the ladies again. Nevertheless: Still one of the best readings I had since long!
- Replied by:
Engineer
(Edit) (Aug 12, 2006)
- I'm impressed by the professional methods of research and marketing applied in the story, as well as the psychological insight. But it's unlikely that a marketing guy is sent to snatching missions on his own. The burglar stunt in chapter 39 was absolutely amateurish and could have endangered the whole organization. From the point of business, the organization uses too large resources - time for a cost controller to step in. ;-) And I would appreciate a bit more and extensified action with the ladies again. Nevertheless: Still one of the best readings I had since long!
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Samantha_Strife
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Apr 8, 2006 |
| |
The one thing that suprised me about this particular piece was the sort of coniessuer atmosphere it bred. Rather than simply have a scenario and an inevitable, mandatory domination, everything is based on cause and effect. The dominant males have their motives, the females have plausable reactions, and the plot paces nicely. 8 out of 10 (8/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Apr 10, 2006)
- Thanks for your review & glad you are enjoying the tale. I guess I don't have enopugh imagination to write without a plot - I need something as a springboard for the ideas on what's going to happen.
There's plenty more to come so I hope you'll go on reading.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
Rocky
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 14, 2006 |
| |
Thoroughly enjoying the story thus far (through the third installment). It is apparent that you take care in proofreading, etc., as I found none of the annoying little spelling or grammar errors so common here (even among my own writings). It's nice to see a story with an actual plot, and the inference of sex makes it all that much bettter. As someone much wiser than I once said, the most powerful sex organ in the human body is the mind, and you certainly have aroused mine! (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Feb 16, 2006)
- Thanks for your review. Glad that you are enjoying it so far. Yes, I do try on the grammar & proofing front although sometimes things go wrong (I once managed to write a chapter in another tale where the names of the two main characters got switched over, which confused some readers!).
I guess there's always going to be a mix of folk that like the more direct stuff and those that enjoy something more inferred. The great thing about this site is the wide range of stuff on offer. There will be a fourth chunk up shortly.
Regards
Freddie
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Feb 28, 2006)
- ...
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 9, 2006 |
| |
Will there actually be sex or some sort of excitement? I would be glad to give a higher score for some type of sexual activity! (5/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Feb 10, 2006)
- Well, yes there will be more sex, but I guess in my stories the sex is only a part of it. It's a fair criticism and I'm not sure there's much for a few chapters.
Excitement? I think there should be. I know some folk find my style a little cold and the "hero" is a bit detached, I guess. In future chapters there are more abductions and more humiliation for the captives, I'll let you judge whether it's exciting enough. There's some more shortly.
Thanks for the review.
- Replied by:
heycarrieanne
(Edit) (Jul 29, 2006)
- I have been trying to redo my rating of this story to a 10 because it has turned into a great great great read! I would buy this book (if you fixed the typos). You need to hippity hop, Mister and write more!! And I will keep on trying to revise my rating.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
La Toya
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 3, 2006 |
| |
Great story. How about letting us in on what happen to Rebecca? (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2006)
- Fear not.. there will be more about Rebecca and Jackie in future chapters.
Thanks for the review.
|
|
|
|
|
| Reviewer:
mkemse
(Edit) |
Rating: |
Feb 1, 2006 |
| |
my type of storyline (9/10)
|
| |
- Replied by:
freddie_clegg
(Edit) (Feb 3, 2006)
- Glad you enjoyed it, watch out for more....
|
|
|
About 