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First Time for Everything
Author: Lady`Sapphire
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(Added on Apr 27, 2006)
(This month 65778 readers) (Total 84460 readers) |
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tim\'s first \"real life\" experience with submission, alone in a cabin in the woods with lovely and enigmatic Ellen.. All the usual disclaimers about adult content and don\'t read if you\'re underage where you live apply |
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Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
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| Reviewer:
nrjb2
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Mar 4, 2012 |
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Enjoyable story. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Lisa Jones
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May 13, 2006 |
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It's a good start and I like the way it's going but..
I understand what you're doing with the capitalisation but I find it off-putting. At first glance it makes the writing look illiterate which you are certainly not! The words alone tell the story and set the mood.
(6/10)
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- Replied by:
Lady`Sapphire
(Edit) (May 13, 2006)
- Thank you. I was thinking that myself, that the capitalization might be off-putting. This is the first time I've written anything like this, so I just decided to try it with that capitalization convention. It's not really an easy way to write, either. lol. Thanks for your comments.
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| Reviewer:
Wistan
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Apr 29, 2006 |
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Gets straight to the point. A bit more of what the characters are thinking and feeling would be good, and it's a bit short as it stands, but overall quite enjoyable. (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Apr 28, 2006 |
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Very nice start, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. After all the Lady has cabin for the weekend. (8/10)
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