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Within 6 Months
Author: Ori Miike
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(Added on Jul 28, 2001)
(This month 10264 readers) (Total 28360 readers) |
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young secretary is subjected at her company. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (3/10) |
Average
Rating:  (2.5/10) |
Highest
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Lowest
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Mar 23, 2004 |
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despite others, i thought it was a good story (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Nitrofox
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Jun 27, 2003 |
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26 and obsessed? My goodness, perhaps you ought to go back to school. Learning to write is certainly helpful when you are writing, or is it throwing a bunch of words in a hat, and then sticking them on paper randomly? (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
rcb
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Apr 17, 2003 |
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One of the worst stories I've read on this site. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
watcher69
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Oct 12, 2001 |
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Not terrible, Not good either merely ok. 2 words Character Development. Has the potential to be a great story but the characters and the situations she gets herself into need to be more clearly defined. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
Jonathan
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Aug 1, 2001 |
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"When I first noticed her on the company-area, she sticked out of the four girls
of them walking to the canteen."
That's the first line of the story. It doesn't improve as it continues. This author
does not qualify as a native speaker of English. If he speaks any other language,
he should write in that one. If not, he just shouldn't write.
Beyond the problems of spelling, grammar, and syntax, the plot development
is terribly jumbled. I don't normally comment on a story unless I've read it all
the way through, but I make an exception here. It's just too painful.
The author describes himself as 26 and obsessed. That's no excuse. (1/10)
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| Reviewer:
tzingfan
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Jul 29, 2001 |
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Long rambling storyline with mistakes(Helena just under 7' tall). Very poor grammer & spelling. Reads like it was composed by a teenager. (1/10)
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