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What I want?
Author: Kraven
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(Added on May 30, 2006)
(This month 15266 readers) (Total 31580 readers) |
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My first real experience with someone else in control... will it be what I want? |
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Average (?):  (8.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Jun 22, 2006 |
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Nice and erotic. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Jun 22, 2006 |
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I loved this. I am so glad to see that there is more. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bigcat
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Jun 22, 2006 |
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That is really well done -- erotic tension, mystery, great pacing. You know your subject well and convey it truthfully. I hope you're enjoying writing it as much as we "unseen watchers" are reading it. Kepp it up. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
trainmanretep
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Jun 8, 2006 |
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Nice, hope there will be additional chapters (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Jun 5, 2006 |
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The story developed nicely despite a few typos. The character development was excellent and it was an enjoyable read. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
DungeonMaster6
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Jun 4, 2006 |
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A tantalizing story indeed. Noticed a few typos here and there, but overall it was well written. (9/10)
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abitbent
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Jun 2, 2006 |
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The content was fabulous and as tame as it may seem to some, the dynamic building between the two characters was amazing. I certainly was hard while reading it, however the writing skills could be much improved. Every sentence either began with "I" or "She". Creative delivery of the content would put this story over the edge to greatness. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Kraven
(Edit) (Jun 4, 2006)
- Thanks for the review!
The comment on the variation of the delivery is an esp good point and something I hadn't realized I'd done. Hopefully, I'll get the time edit the story.
As for it being tame, I know.. I wasn't sure about posting it/how it'd be received. The basic idea is that over time the dynamic would develop and would get "kinkier" -- keep in mind, both are new to their respective roles/positions, so it didn't seem right to jump right into hardcore BDSM...
Again, thanks for the review and suggestions!
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| Reviewer:
Lisa Jones
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May 31, 2006 |
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Beautifully written and a right tease all on it's own! Please, please, please can we have more. I feel almost like your hero, tantalised by what's in store but unable to do anything about it until you write the next chapter! (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Kraven
(Edit) (Jun 4, 2006)
- *tips his imaginary hat*
Thanks for taking the time to drop me a line! Glad you enjoyed it! There is a part II already typed and I'm considering submitting it this week...
If I might ask, any thoughts on tweaks to the story?
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Lisa Jones
(Edit) (Jul 12, 2006)
- Part II more than lives up to the promise of part 1, Oooh, what a tease you are!!!
Please, please, please, if I ask ever so nicely, will you write more? I want to meet Adia so, so much!!
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MrAccess
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May 31, 2006 |
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Excellent, realistic start, has got me wanting the read more. I'm looking forward to knowing the character of the man who will do anything and why a woman would want such a man. (10/10)
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