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Au Pair Girl
Author: Satan_Klaus
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(Added on Jun 23, 2006)
(This month 31604 readers) (Total 68953 readers) |
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A man reflects on his enslaved Au Pair girl in a unique writing style. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7.5/10) |
Average
Rating:  (8/10) |
Highest
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| Reviewer:
Mr. Pete
(Edit) |
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Jul 10, 2008 |
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Some reviewers just don't seem to get it. I do. Very nice! (When you inspire me how to treat my girlfriend, I must give high marks :) (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
grinner666
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Mar 19, 2008 |
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Okay, I liked the calculated cruelty of the narrator ... ESPECIALLY when he pretends it's a kindness. The biggest weakness in the story is the lack of any resistance or, indeed, personality from the girl. I prefer a story that's a STORY, not just a catalog of cruelties. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Satan_Klaus
(Edit) (Jul 7, 2007)
- You have to keep in mind that it is a very short story so there is no room for any character development. In addition, the writing style that I used makes expressing her personality difficult at best. I really don't think I can improve on the story by adding to it, that would only destroy the atmosphere I have created. I'm afraid you will have to accept it as it is: both its unique strenghts but also its resulting shortcommings.
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grinner666
(Edit) (Mar 19, 2008)
- Sorry, "this is a SHORT story" does NOT excuse you from making it a fucking STORY.
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| Reviewer:
Venom
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Feb 23, 2008 |
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WHAT you are writing isn't very new or sensational; the point is HOW you let this nasty little story find its way to perfidy.
For example: forcing Marie to use her paper towel dairy for cleaning up is a wicked idea. (8/10)
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bmtphoenix
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Jan 7, 2008 |
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Very nice. I enjoyed it a lot. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
sac
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Feb 24, 2007 |
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Little bit short. Hopefully continued. Like "the special style". (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bracemaiden
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Jul 23, 2006 |
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Well written, but the whole 16 year old/underage mom thing was a bit of a turn off.
I liked the whole cable arrangement. Clever! (8/10)
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- Replied by:
Satan_Klaus
(Edit) (Jul 23, 2006)
- The special writing style I used lives from being more wicked every paragraph. So I had to come up with very bad things for the end.
I had trouble with this part myself and considered leaving it out altogether but in the end my editors and I decided to leave it in. I hope you are not offended, that was not the intention.
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| Reviewer:
dennisthmn
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Jul 16, 2006 |
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nice story, well worthreading (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Jun 23, 2006 |
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An interesting way of telling the story. Perhaps a sequel or a chapeter from her point of view, letting us know how they got into the situation? (7/10)
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woolfighter
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Jun 23, 2006 |
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Nice way of telling things, but please give us the background of Marie, thx (8/10)
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