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Punished
Author: fempainpig
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(Added on Aug 13, 2001)
(This month 17961 readers) (Total 45154 readers) |
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A slave is punished for her sisters transgressions. |
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Weighed
Average (?):  (7/10) |
Average
Rating:  (7.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
e.e. norcod
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Oct 27, 2003 |
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First, I have to say that this particular sub-genera, brutal abuse, is not my favorite (I get off on corporal punishment). Second I must add that I like stories that develope slowly. Given these caveats I think that this is a good story.
The style is like the content, slam, bam, thank you mam. Which gives it the feel of 1940's noir. The style is slightly marred by about three typo's that spellchek didn't catch (e.g. on for one). None the less the action predominant, color deficient prose helps establish the dark mood.
Lastly, I must agree with the comments of hyphen666 who like the character sketch of painpig but laments the one dimensional sketch of the master.
As hyphen666 notes maybe we will see more of this author's work. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
kaleun
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Oct 3, 2001 |
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This was a very good story.
I liked it (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
bookster
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Aug 19, 2001 |
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disdainful master and dispairing slave,nothing dynamic going on (5/10)
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| Reviewer:
hyphen666
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Aug 15, 2001 |
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I am biased towards this kind of story, and my rating reflects this. The writing is adequate to good with good editing. I like the relationship between the pain slut and her parents and look forward to more stories addressing this. On the other hand the master appears to be totally one-dimensional and either is a wimp or a closet case when it comes to sex. I hope the pain slut ditches this loser quickly. (7/10)
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