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Jennifer's New Family
Author: crystelia
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(Added on Aug 17, 2006)
(This month 304977 readers) (Total 549769 readers) |
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Jennifer's new step father and step brothers take a very active and brutal interest in her, then turn their attentions to her mother as well! |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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Rating:  (9.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
Jorgy444
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Jul 21, 2012 |
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Please proofread your work.
Too sadistic for me, characters aren't
very well developed, oh well. (6/10)
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JimmyJump
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Jan 28, 2009 |
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Never was too keen on stories where a nice person was cheated and treated unfair all the time, just to belittle her or get her punished, only to make fun of the girl bihind her back.
I also dislike people who play holier than thou while at the same time tricking other folks into paying for what others have done.
But, to my delight, the drawing of Jennifer's character is so well done, her train of thought delicately presented, that it saves the tale.
Nice work!
JJ (9/10)
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efwb2
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Dec 9, 2008 |
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I love this story, it is well written, great story lines and i look foward to the next chapters.
Well done to the auther. (10/10)
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sluttycumgirl
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Aug 28, 2008 |
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I cant wait for the next chapters I love this story! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
woolfighter
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Mar 27, 2008 |
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The new chapters are at least as good as the previous. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I'll do my best! Thanks!
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| Reviewer:
ramses
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Feb 14, 2008 |
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Very nice and promising start. A bit soft at the moment, but I expect that will change as the story develops. I like the descriptions of the girl's feelings.
feb. 2008:
I liked the story before, and it keeps getting better. Congratulations to the author. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I think that understanding her feelings is the most erotic part of the story, so I try to put a lot of emphasis on that. I don't care for stories where lots of things happen, but we never get a good picture of how the person reacts to what is happening at an emotional level. I hope things have gotten hard enough for you. They are about to get harder yet!
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bird3678
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Feb 2, 2008 |
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This is one of the best stories on the Net. I really enjoy how the author gets into the mind of Jennifer and her mom, it makes it much more enjoyable! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Haelix
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Jan 31, 2008 |
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For some reason I haven't seen this story until the latest post. It absolutely pegs everything I love about stories posted on this site. Intelligently written and emotionally complex in a way that you feel bad for the girl, yet dirty and hot enough that you really really want them to keep doing more to her! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Jan 31, 2008)
- Thanks Haelix. I really enjoy the complexity of writing stories that inspire conflicting feelings in the reader. Glad you're enjoying it! Just wait till you see what's in store for the new girls!
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mkemse
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Nov 27, 2007 |
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not realy enough to go no yet, but i will revise my rating as yiu continue to post more chapters, can't stop reading it now (9/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I hope you've been able to continue to read the story. Please let me know what you think as the story moves along, and thanks to you and everyone for taking the time to rank it and post a review!
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foldsdasub
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Sep 15, 2006 |
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Nice, nice story enjoyed it. (10/10)
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schoolboylv
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Sep 14, 2006 |
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I am torn. I can't get enough of this story but at the same time I actually feel bad for the poor little girl. Keep up the good work! (10/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I'm glad you're enjoying it! That's exactly the sort of reaction I was hoping for from the reader :)
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Blackmailer
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Sep 12, 2006 |
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excelent and exciting story (10/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- Thank you for the kind words! I'll try to keep up to your expectations :)
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| Reviewer:
heycarrieanne
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Sep 9, 2006 |
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YIKES That is some family to marry into! A well-written and well-paced story. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I appreciate the comment. It keeps me encouraged to write more!
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chksng19
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Sep 9, 2006 |
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Pretty good story, hope to see more soon. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- Thank you! I promise to keep tormenting Jennifer and her mother quickly!
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| Reviewer:
mister0100
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Sep 5, 2006 |
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love the rough action. (10/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I'm glad you like it, because it's getting a whole lot rougher! :)
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| Reviewer:
johhnyboy
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Sep 2, 2006 |
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Agree with most comments. Excellent idea and getting better and there are not too many of those about. Congratulations and keep it up.I would sugest the story has been written by a 'player' rather than spectator'. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- You're making me blush :) I appreciate the comments. Makes me think it's going to be hard to live up to the standard in whatever other story I might come up with!
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| Reviewer:
geoff
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Aug 22, 2006 |
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Excellent start. Very good story development and well constructed. The only cticism - I agree with Mike, the delivery is in sections that are too small. Which I guess is a backhanded compliment, I want the next installment. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- Thank you for the kind words and encouragement. I think what I appreciate most is the comment about being well-constructed. That means a lot to me. As for the size of the parts...I modeled this loosely on the style and format of the old Greenleaf Classics (readmagic.com) and the excellent work of authors such as Paul Gable. The size of the chapters is about what they used in those books. I just wanted to see if I was up to the challenge of writing something similar to those.
- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
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| Reviewer:
cala
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Aug 19, 2006 |
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I very much look forward to reading further chapters. Especially your treatment of Jennifer's mindset against prolonged humiliation. (8/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- Thanks! I hope Jennifer's mindset is satisfying for you so far :)
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| Reviewer:
mike uk reader
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Aug 18, 2006 |
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What a wonderful story start from a new author to me on this site my only criticism is the first part here posted length and I hope we are not waiting months for more parts you have great talent in weaving very good erotica of this kind my favorite fiction. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
crystelia
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I appreciate your encouragement. I promise that any wait will be days, not months :)
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