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Carole\'s Big Mistake
Author: thumb
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(Added on Sep 7, 2006)
(This month 108201 readers) (Total 214289 readers) |
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Married woman esplores her fantasies and is sucked into more then she imagined |
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Average (?):  (9/10) |
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| Reviewer:
arlene(bigsissy)
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Feb 21, 2012 |
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i enjoyed reading it very much
please add to the story
thanks for sharing (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
priscillaolorien
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Jun 20, 2010 |
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I LOVE you writingstyle. Very refined, and not vuldar at all. Very psychological approach, wich I like very much. I hope you would like to add some chapters to this story. Excellent work! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
rilawild
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Dec 17, 2006 |
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Really good start and it keeps getting better. I'm sure that we'll find out how LC gets her information - I have a few ideas :)
The only reason I didn't rate it 10 was the typos I noticed and more importantly for me, I found the long paragraphs hard read at times. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
azrlg17
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Nov 18, 2006 |
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I really like the scene in the spa. Apart from that I don't like the characterization of the protagonists.
I don't understand the domme. Why does she take her and force her to have sex with so many people but never take her herself? Doesn't she want first dibs?
I don't understand the sub, why did she agree to this? LC said that once she agreed she would destroy her family if she ever tried to get out. But if she didn't agree then nothing would happen. Even if she liked what was happening concern for her family should have stopped her. She should have been blackmailed into the whole thing. And why would Carol stay in Florida? Why not go back to Chicago where all her friends were?
And the story should have a scifi or fantasy label for the amount of information LC was able to find out about Carol. OK, you can find out financial, medical and genealogical details about a person. Although details about an abortion are hard to find. And who the father was? But how would she know about how good an old college boyfriend was in bed?
(6/10)
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Nov 17, 2006 |
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Very good story and excellent plot. (8/10)
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Ironwulf
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Oct 9, 2006 |
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As I live in the tampa bay area it is nice to be reading a story taking place in this locale.
Makes me wonder if I might know Carole, or maybe its that I wish I did. hahaha
Keep up the great work, its always enjoyable reading your stories. I was trying to think of why I enjoy them so much and I believe its because of the way reality is blended into the fantasy.
My biggest concern with the story as it stands today would be that LC is really coming on strong with the inside information to the point that I fear Carole might consider a dive off the Skyway bridge to save herself and her family.
I guess what I am saying is that not knowing how LC could have so much knowledge about Carole in such a short time would be a very scary thing to her and when people are scared they don't always react predictively.
LC seems to be very sure that Carole's new found desire to be dominated will keep her fear in check. I as well as the many others reading the story certainly hope this will be the case otherwise this could end up as a very short story. hahaha
I am curious about LC and what she is striving for and why. I originally thought she wanted Carole for her personal plaything but in the last chapter she says "Training begins by you being made into a highly desirable model without being a slut." and ends a short time later with her making Carole chant her new mantra "I am a whoring slut" for the cameras.
I am sure it all has meaning and the story outline if seen would reveal it. However, we shall have to wait and watch as each piece of the puzzle falls into place. Something I look forward too. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
zcon_disk
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Sep 14, 2006 |
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Spectacular! I was afraid 5 years of anticipation since Owned Teacher petered out would raise the bar to high for even Thumb to pass, but I was clearly wrong to doubt - even with just two chapters down, this is almost a textbook on how to effectively write a BDSM/humiliation story. Eagerly awaiting more. (10/10)
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Lee Boudine
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Sep 14, 2006 |
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I find the detailed sequence of details are constructed to create a highly erotic fantasy. Well written so as to involve this male reader. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Millie
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Sep 13, 2006 |
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The story is excellent, a few mistakes that a proof reader would spot for you though. I am really looking forward to reading the third part.
(8/10)
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C_Lakewood
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Sep 11, 2006 |
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I'd rate it higher on spec, if it weren't for the
many typos. Still, like the other reviewers, I'm
ecstatic to see thumb return. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
slutsteph
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Sep 10, 2006 |
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girl totally agrees with all the reviews below. Please, Sir, give your readers hope that you will continue Owned Teacher. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
Parker
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Sep 9, 2006 |
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Good to hear you're feeling better and nice to see you're writing again. This is a good start. Can't wait to see how it develops. And I hope you can get back to finish up Owned Teacher again one day as well. (8/10)
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castle2001
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Sep 8, 2006 |
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Please continue. A promising start. (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
brianb0806
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Sep 8, 2006 |
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Glad to see you back Thumb. Keep up the great work! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Sep 8, 2006 |
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An excellent start in your well-written tradition. Looking forward to more! (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
GwaiLo
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Sep 7, 2006 |
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Wow, Thumb is back ! This is fantastic news !
Can't wait to read more :) (9/10)
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Sep 7, 2006 |
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YOU ARE BACK, NOTHING ELSE NEEDS TO BE SAID!!!!
hope you plan to this realy soon of to a great classic thumb start (10/10)
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- Replied by:
Lee Boudine
(Edit) (Sep 14, 2006)
- I read this story and agree wholeheartedly with your highest rating. Looking forward to more......................
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| Reviewer:
gundam
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Sep 7, 2006 |
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YA!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Thumb's back!!!!!!!!!!!!
Glad to see you writing again, hope you will also continue "Owned Teacher" in the near future.
Again, welcome back (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
Rocky
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Sep 7, 2006 |
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Excellent start to what I hope will be another fantastic story. It certainly might be worthy of a 10, depending how future installments go, and I will be looking foreward to more chapters.
Does this mean you're back? If so, I hope you'll dust off Owned Teacher and bring it to a conclusion. It has been one of my favorite stories since you began posting it several years ago! (9/10)
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