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The Intake Center
Author: Elecutrix
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(Added on Oct 4, 2006)
(This month 16385 readers) (Total 32766 readers) |
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\"Processing\" inmates at a women\'s prison in 2105 |
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Average (?):  (6/10) |
Average
Rating:  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Sep 30, 2007 |
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An interesting variety in scorings: Naughty-naughty at scoring yourself. (*grin*) Repeating the same tale twice (the second time shouting) does not make it better, or more interesting. You might check the dates in the second paragraph; one or the other is wrong, or they waited almost a hundred years to find a criminal who needed such processing.
While the tale is a good start, there is much more that needs be said. I'm hoping you have further chapters planned. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
Spitman
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Oct 8, 2006 |
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An excellent start. The vacuum machine is a nice idea, and what would work well in a continuation is more automation of prison life consistent with this idea. Like a 're-education' punishment machine to for non-compliance, some kind of pleasure machine to reward compliance, or maybe success with electronic assignments, and as much replacement of staff with machines as possible.
You need to decide what aspect of prison life jumps out of your thoughts, and automate it, describing the human experience as well as the process from an observer's viewpoint. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
elecutrix
(Edit) (Oct 8, 2006)
- Thanks for the kind review! Would love to see you review my other stories.
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| Reviewer:
elecutrix
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Oct 5, 2006 |
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Great story! (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
hasler
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Oct 4, 2006 |
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One fucked up mind. It is not fun to try to eroticice the worst shame on the western world, the perverted us correction system and worst of all, the fact that they like china iran and irak (good company, not??) still executes their citicens! (4/10)
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- Replied by:
elecutrix
(Edit) (Oct 5, 2006)
- At least I know how to spell!
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| Reviewer:
Lee Boudine
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Oct 4, 2006 |
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An interesting concept which is not developed in explicit detail. Perhaps it is the writers intent to activate the reader's imagination. If so she is successful. However, I prefer more detailed reporting of the subjects reaction to being stripped and humiliated. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
elecutrix
(Edit) (Oct 5, 2006)
- Feel free to provide any details you desire. I'm always open to suggestions. thx.
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| Reviewer:
mkemse
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Oct 4, 2006 |
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the story is WAY to short even for a start (4/10)
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- Replied by:
elecutrix
(Edit) (Oct 5, 2006)
- Feel free to offer any ideas to make the story longer and better. thx.
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