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The Mastectomy Mess
Author: Book of Evils
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(Added on Oct 31, 2006)
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A high profile bitch Doctor has a mastectomy and lives to regret it |
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Average (?):  (5.5/10) |
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Rating: (5.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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Well i'm a little surprised by some negative comments. If you read it as a first chapter in a book, it stops at the "normal" place. The tension is building up, the Dr reactions are quite normal as she wants to scope with the problem she is facing.
Found it very good. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
Book of Evils
(Edit) (Nov 17, 2006)
- Hello jip:
I really do thank you for the affirmation for this story. To me, it shows you took the time to absorb what the Doc was feeling AND you placed the focus exactly where it belongs. How is she going to (try to) cope with what she's facing? Not what am I going to do to her. And that is the biggest part of the focus of my stories, what are the victims experiencing and what measures will they go to, to try to avoid their fates. I appreciate your perception and support.
Regards
BofE
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Mothbrad
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Nov 7, 2006 |
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The second story I've read from this author, and equally brutal and nasty as the other one. I look forward to this story continuing, and the promise of that last paragraph played out in full. Very solid read. (7/10)
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- Replied by:
Book of Evils
(Edit) (Nov 17, 2006)
- Hi Mothbrad:
As always, thanks and thanks.
Regards
BofE
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| Reviewer:
kimmi
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Nov 3, 2006 |
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Huh???
excrutiatingly slow setup for a rushed ending. Nice premise but in the end, it fails to deliver.
"In about an hour I had her hog tied, gagged and in my special van on her way to my special torture prison. What happened to her over the next few months, at some point, I'll recount, but for now, suffice to say, she was one unhappy camper with one unhappy cunt who, the same as before, ended up with no tits."
These are your words. Obviously a rushed ending.
(1/10)
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- Replied by:
Book of Evils
(Edit) (Nov 3, 2006)
- From one of your own previous reviews,
"Take it slow....build tension...make us see things through her eyes..."
Which is it then?
Not sure how the first chapter, the premise of which was gaining complete control over her, can be considered the end.
BofE
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| Reviewer:
chksng19
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Nov 1, 2006 |
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Certainly a concept for a story that is original, but in this case not well told. Too many choppy sentences, repetitive phrases, and incomplete thoughts. Not a smoothly flowing tale... but, perhaps, you have a reason for that. Perhaps to set a mood.
I'd like to see the repitition removed, for sure, and the page numbers. Both will distract readers. (5/10)
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- Replied by:
Book of Evils
(Edit) (Nov 2, 2006)
- Perhaps it might help you to listen to the way people speak in the real world, in conversation, during unscripted exchanges. Of course it's choppy and repetitive. That's how most back and forth dialogues sound - people interrupting and interjecting into their own thought streams, as they speak.
My particular tale is intended to be read slowly. The images of the particular moment, absorbed to lead to the next unfolding situation. Everything slightly incremental.
Since all my stories are fairly lengthy, page numbers enable a reader to know how much time to set aside to finish reading it or where they have left off or to find a particular passage that might have caught their interest, piqued their perversion, you might say.
Anyhow, the notion that all 'authors' should write and sound the same has about as much validity as any other notion of uniform conformity within the human experience.
If it sounds as if I didn't appreciate your review comments, that would be correct. I strive for clarity and preciseness of image and plot, to paint the word picture that clearly brings the reader's mind and imagination to the situation at hand.
I would invite other readers' observations about whether or not I succeeded.
Regards.
Bof E
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