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Kathy the Mod
Author: MajorDomo
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(Added on Nov 15, 2006)
(This month 35151 readers) (Total 68019 readers) |
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Extreme and detailed modification of my ex-fiance. Starting mild then morphing into nullification and other freakyness over a two year period. Starts a bit slow, but picks up after Chapter Two. |
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Average (?): (7.5/10) |
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Reviewer:
JimmyJump
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Oct 11, 2010 |
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Funny how guys love goils, but the goils become 'bitches' after they walk out on their guy. When a guy walks out on his goil, everything is milk and honey, mind. The title also had me wondering what happened to the times when a 'mod' was just the opposite of a 'rocker'. Anyway, besides the stinking attitude of the narrator (and a few things The Dean pointed out), I liked "Kathy The Mod". Wasn't bothered too much by the legality/possibility of the contract, although I agree to a certain extent with what Benfan says. On the other hand, we're dealing with fiction here, so a certain amount of poetic freedom is justified. JJ (8/10)
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Reviewer:
millymooe
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Apr 1, 2008 |
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So very good! Love the way written. Just desperate for next part, hopefully covering all the catagories stated in Chp. 1. Thank you Major Domo. For yet another two towels to be washed. *smile* (10/10)
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Reviewer:
Benfan
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Nov 19, 2006 |
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Vivid characters and interaction, very interesting premise. I enjoy the contract premise though it is a little overdone, and only borderline plausible. The skipping back and forth between "background" and present time is a little clumsy. But overall there's more to like here than complain about and I find myself eager to see the next installment! 7 out of 10 for now with potential to upgrade if future chapters are edited a little better. (7/10)
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Reviewer:
hisc2003
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Nov 16, 2006 |
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Looking to see how this promising start progresses. (8/10)
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Reviewer:
H Dean
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Nov 16, 2006 |
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This story has me a bit split... The attitude was right with this piece and the few technical errors were not terribly distracting. Also, the manner in which the story was put together lends to anticipation of what is going to happen. However, like one other reviewer, I was not enthralled with the "legal" aspects and it was this that distracted me from true enjoyment of what could be a rather erotic story. One other thing that bothered me was the switch from present tense to past tense style. It's annoying to read when you jump like that. As for my review rating - the writing skills of this author are better than a "5" but the holes in the story and the present tense/past tense style demanded an average rating. On the other hand - after this rough review - I must say that, due to the attitude of the story, I am rather looking forward to more. (5/10)
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Reviewer:
La Toya
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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A very good start/set-up for what is to come. (8/10)
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Reviewer:
dennisthmn
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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A nice start to an interesting story (9/10)
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Reviewer:
castle2001
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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Let us not quible over legal details. Good beginning to what I hope delivers on the MOD part of the title. (8/10)
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Reviewer:
Dick the Slaver
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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This is a good beginning. Bring on more chapters ASAP (9/10)
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Reviewer:
azrlg17
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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Well so far the author has gone to great lengths to try to think up a contract that would legally enslave someone. But the contract wouldn't be just null and void if it went to court. And his idea that a court would see K. as an accomplice to her own torture is just ridiculous. And if parts of legal contract are illegal other parts would still be legal (like the paying for services). Sadly most of the legal parts are bullshit. If he does what he plans to do and it got to a process he would still get into jail for illegal imprisonment, assault, practicing medicine without a doctors license, fraud,... It only would be worse for him because due to the contract it could be proven that all was premeditated. You can give "informed consent for medical experimentation" but it's for a specific procedure and only at a hospital (and not every hospital is allowed to do that) and the FDA has to approve medical experiments. Of course in this story the victim will probably be too stupid to see this. So the first chapter basically is superfluous. (4/10)
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- Replied by:
millymooe
(Edit) (Apr 1, 2008)
- I disagree.
Purely on that it is a fictional story and if the almost prelude to the main story, it fits fine for me. I could see myself in Katherines position and yes, I'd fall for it.! *smile* milly mooe(s) a lot.
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Reviewer:
mkemse
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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good start waiting for more (7/10)
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Reviewer:
cala
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Nov 15, 2006 |
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Apart from the narrator's asides to the reader, (which break the story's flow) this is a great first chapter. A good amount of detail, and the easy to read conversational style of writing, make me look forward to the second chapter; The reality of her situation closing in on Katherine. (8/10)
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