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Foot entrapment
Author: Master Browne
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(Added on Dec 4, 2006)
(This month 19156 readers) (Total 40936 readers) |
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About a girl who applies for a job and get a bit more. |
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| Reviewer:
Chi90504
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Oct 14, 2012 |
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a lot of misspelled words or using the wrong word (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
azrlg17
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Dec 5, 2006 |
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My god is this bad. The grammar and spelling is atrocious. So bad that at parts its borderline incomprehensible. There are no quotation marks around the dialogue which makes it hard to read. The sex is bad. There is no explanation or motivation given why her best friend does this to her. The story is illogical in so many places it's just ridiculous e.g. she is free so many times and never goes to the cops? Or almost everybody she knew prior to her enslavement was involved in enslaving her? Or everybody knows what happens to her, but in this strange universe nobody helps (except for the end)? 200 14-16 year old boys kan keep quiet about an orgy? And the end is too abrupt. I would like to know what happened to the slavers (but then again I was thankful it was over). The story is missing a scifi tag for the device they put in her head. (2/10)
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| Reviewer:
efwb1
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Dec 5, 2006 |
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Great storie spelling was a wee bit wack but good storie (10/10)
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NateInPhilly
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Dec 4, 2006 |
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The author needs to work on his writing skills. He is properly kinky and enjoyable, but you need to be used to reading english-as-a-second-language. (5/10)
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