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Home Invasion
Author: whisky
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(Added on Jan 12, 2007)
(This month 11282 readers) (Total 23397 readers) |
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A man\'s home may not be his castle |
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Average (?):  (6.5/10) |
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| Reviewer:
mirage
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Oct 7, 2007 |
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the bondage part later in the story is well done - very descriptive. "plain looking woman" - you should have a hot femme fatale. (7/10)
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| Reviewer:
drain1478
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Apr 21, 2007 |
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I really liked this story and I hope you continue to write more like it. (8/10)
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| Reviewer:
jip
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Jan 16, 2007 |
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suspect the rest is following later? (6/10)
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| Reviewer:
wistan
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Jan 14, 2007 |
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It's a bit hard to know what to make of this one. As a story in itself it's not really up to much; it's very short and to the point, which is no bad thing really, but the length means there is relatively little detail. It's just a stream of actions "she did this, then she did that, and before I knew it she the other..." If the point of this is to be a short story with a bondage theme, then it's not really very good. The author needs to take his (or her) time over the scene, describe it in more detail.
However, this does read a bit like the opening chapter of a longer story. If that's the idea, then the brevity of this part would be more acceptable and another point or two might be added to the score. (5/10)
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