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Becoming a servent to Master and Mistress
Author: allison
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(Added on Jan 23, 2007)
(This month 13252 readers) (Total 24252 readers) |
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I go into a bar and I am treated as a toilet, trash can and a total slut and I slowly become a slave to rich and powerful married couple who will torture me to their liking... |
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Average (?):  (4/10) |
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| Reviewer:
slaveneedledick
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Jan 29, 2007 |
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After reading the story I must agree with the other reviewers. The story is written at a very low grade level and lacks imagination. (4/10)
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azrlg17
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Jan 24, 2007 |
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Not only is the writing style 4th grade but the story itself is lame too. The victim doesn't cry for help. The abductors are criminally stupid. The barman seems to be an insider but the way they abduct her is an invitation to be caught by the cops.
Oh yeah and the sex so far is bad too. (3/10)
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| Reviewer:
H Dean
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Jan 24, 2007 |
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Technically, this story could be much better. However, the overlying problem is the lack of imagination that went into this story's crafting. It was simple and plainly put; so much so that I was completely disinterested in the story's outcome. (4/10)
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masterdw
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Jan 23, 2007 |
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Writing is at 4th grade level . Story is nothing special, but may go somewhere later on. I would not bet on it. (3/10)
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