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The Birthday Present
Author: MasterD
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(Added on Jan 31, 2007)
(This month 18326 readers) (Total 34105 readers) |
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A young wife wants to improve her sex life and give herself to her husband for 48 hours.PLEASE leave me feedback. This is my third attempt and I have not had sufficient feedback on my other two and they are both left unfinished. This is viewed as a three parter but could be extended if people like it, or I could just leave it as is. Pleas let me know if you have any ideas or things that you would like to see. |
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| Reviewer:
Templer2187
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Jul 12, 2011 |
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Good story, I would definatley like there to be more chapters. I think there is great scope for Carols wants and fantasies that have lead her here; to be drawn out of her and to fuel the husbands desires, and push both of their limits. (8/10)
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Escritor
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Oct 11, 2008 |
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Nice story, well written and somewhat sweet. A little unbelievable for myself. I think a "real Carol" would have run away after hearing what Andy asked of her. But still this is fiction and I enjoyed it as that. Some parts had their descriptions too short and rushed, like when he pisses on her (I think this is not extreme per se, but it is in the setting and background that is performed on).
Would really enjoy to read further developments of the story. (8/10)
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razmataz
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Jan 27, 2008 |
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Very pkausable story and I just really enjoyed it. Any one could imagine this with their own woman! (9/10)
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vsubmits2u
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Dec 16, 2007 |
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Very well written. As always, you understand what to write about training her. Please write more pushing her further and further into her total submission, beyond 48 hours. (10/10)
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| Reviewer:
Charles E. Campbell
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Feb 2, 2007 |
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Well crafted story. Quite believable. Characters could be the couple next door. I hope for more to follow. Test her will to determine the depths to which she will sink in her "gift" of herself. (9/10)
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heycarrieanne
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Feb 1, 2007 |
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Nicely written story -- I look forward to reading more. (8/10)
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kring1000
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Feb 1, 2007 |
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Nice story, I'm awaiting eagerly how the young wife will pleasure her man (and others ?) sexual wise. (8/10)
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Nikolaj
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Feb 1, 2007 |
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Very good and nice story. I just have a hope that this is only first 48 hours. (9/10)
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- Replied by:
masterdw
(Edit) (Feb 1, 2007)
- This was the first night. Future chapters will deal with Day 1 and day 2. If there is a demand I could continue into the work week and I could have a nice long summer vacation.
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